Talk:How to Save a Life (Grey's Anatomy)/GA2

Page contents not supported in other languages.
From Wikipedia, the free encyclopedia

GA Review[edit]

GA toolbox
Reviewing

Article (edit | visual edit | history) · Article talk (edit | history) · Watch

Reviewer: Aoba47 (talk · contribs) 19:42, 3 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

  • Will grab this for a review again if that is okay with you. Aoba47 (talk) 19:42, 3 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]
Comments
  • I do not believe the term "showrunner" needs to be linked in the lead; same applies to the body of the article.
  • The word "episode" is repeated multiple times in close proximity in the lead's first paragraph so please add some variety to avoid repetition.
  • I do not believe you need the "also" in the phrase "also has the fewest". This sentence is more so dealing with the production side of the episode, and the the word "also" provides a little bit of a strange link to the previous sentences on the plot.
  • The prose in the "Plot" section and the "Critical reception" subsection is much stronger now so great job with that.
  • If possible, specify "on location" in the "Production" section (i.e. where were the scenes shot on location?)?
Not sure if I can figure that out, but I agree that on location sounds vague, does it look any better now?
  • Make sure the episode title is presented consistently in quotation marks as I see one instance in the same section where it is in italics.
  • I would revise the phrase "the bold move" as it sounds a little too POV-ish to me.
  • The word "re-upped" sounds a little too informal to me so I would use a stronger word choice.
  • Reference 24 is dead and either needs to be replaced or found through a website archive.
Final comments
  • Wonderful work with this. My notes are relatively minor as I believe that this is pretty much ready for GA. If you want to bring this to FAC in the future, I would just advise you to look at the quotes and see if there would be a way to either paraphrase or more thoughtful incorporate them in the rest of the content, but otherwise, everything looks good. Will pass this once my comments are addressed. Aoba47 (talk) 19:58, 3 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]
@Aoba47: Fixed everything (hopefully). Can't thank you enough, can I? NumerounovedantTalk 20:55, 3 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]
Final verdict
  • Wonderful work with this. I will ✓ Pass this. Aoba47 (talk) 23:52, 3 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]
Retrieved from "https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=Talk:How_to_Save_a_Life_(Grey%27s_Anatomy)/GA2&oldid=1136803838"