Talk:If I Don't Have You/GA1
GA Review[edit]
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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 06:17, 12 December 2017 (UTC)
Soon, Cartoon network freak (talk) 06:17, 12 December 2017 (UTC)
Lead[edit]
- and Streamline Records. It replaced → and Streamline Records, replacing (it sounds better, is not very long and avoids the repetition of "it")
- song was written by Tamar Braxton → unlink "Tamar Braxton" and only use her last name
- and Tiyon "TC" Mack. → and Tiyon "TC" Mack, while production was solely handled by Da Internz
- for the 58th Annual Grammy Awards → at the...
- on the R&B/Hip-Hop Airplay Billboard chart. → remove "Billboard" here
- In the accompanying music video, Braxton → In an accompanying music video released on June 9, 2015, Braxton
- The visuals feature American → The visual features American
- The video received positive → replace "the video" with "the clip" to avoid repetition
Infobox[edit]
- Everything seems on point here ;)
Background and release[edit]
- Nothing I can really complain about! Well-written!
Composition and lyrics[edit]
- The instrumental includes a piano.[8] The song focuses → Its instrumentation includes a piano,[8] while the song focuses (to avoid short, clipped sentences)
- Music sample > Include the fact that it's an R&B song in its description
Reception[edit]
- for the 58th Annual → at the...
- that would appeal listeners → that would appeal to listeners
- wrote that the song → replace "the song" with "the track" to avoid repetition
- was appropriate for those "the mood for a good cry (or perhaps an all-out profound wail)" → I think a word's missing here or something because it doesn't make any sense
- R&B/Hip-Hop Airplay Billboard chart on → Remove "Billboard" here
Music video[edit]
- The accompanying music video → An accompanying music video
- Prior to its release → replace "release" with "premiere" to avoid repetition
- A majority of the video → replace "video" with "clip" or "visual" to a. r.
- It ends with Braxton → replace "Braxton" with "the singer" to a. r.
- Please connect the third with the fourth paragraph; they deal with similar content and having so many (thin) paras for a section is not appropriate
- received a positive response → you don't need the "a" here, but can leave it as it is if you want to
Track listing[edit]
- Flawless ;)
Credits and personnel[edit]
- Flawless ;)
Charts[edit]
- Flawless ;)
Release history[edit]
- Flawless ;)
Other stuff[edit]
Copy-violation[edit]
- 27.5% is acceptable!
Media[edit]
- Sample seems stable
References[edit]
- As far as I checked them, the references do cover the assertations made in this article
- No dead links! Good job!
Outcome[edit]
- On hold for 7 days! Good job! I also like the song, and I took the time to watch its video entirely on YouTube (). Best regards, Cartoon network freak (talk) 12:01, 17 December 2017 (UTC)
- @Cartoon network freak: Thank you for your review. I believe that I have addressed everything. I hope you enjoyed the video. Aoba47 (talk) 16:52, 17 December 2017 (UTC)
- Gladly passing! Congrats; Cartoon network freak (talk) 18:26, 17 December 2017 (UTC)
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