Talk:Indiana Jones and the Temple of Doom/GA1

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GA Review[edit]

Everything's looking pretty good. Here are a few suggestions/comments:

  • In the lead, maybe specify where Elstree Studios are. Anyone not familiar wouldn't have a clue where they were, considering we've just been discussing India.
  • Ford suffered a severe spinal disc herniation during filming - Harrison Ford's full name isn't mentioned before this, so now's a good time.
  • When talking about Kate Capshaw, maybe mention that Marion Ravenwood was from Raiders of the Lost Ark, so as not to assume that readers know this already.
  • The character is named after a 17th century Indian painter - a particular one, or no?
  • I think Temple of Doom represents a chaotic period in both [Lucas and Spielberg] their lives - should "their" go before the square brackets?
  • Posessive "Lucas's" or "Lucas'"? Pick one, and sweep through the article to make it consistent. We have Lucas's initial idea but then on the line below "Lucas' Alaskan Malamute".
  • Budgetary inflation caused Temple of Doom to cost $8 million more than Raiders of the Lost Ark - maybe mention how much it did end up costing.
  • Again, under Filming, maybe mention where Elstree Studios are. They could be in New Zealand!
  • 8/9 sound stages at Elstree occupied the filming of Temple of Doom - first, it might be better to say "...Elstree were occupied with..." just because one doesn't say "The bathroom occupied me"; instead, they'd say "I occupied the bathroom" or more crudely "The bathroom was occupied with me". Second, does "8/9" mean eight out of nine? If so, maybe write it that way to avoid confusion and to spell out small numbers per WP:MOSNUM.
  • a second was compiled by costume designer Anthony Powell - maybe reword. One doesn't really "compile a dress".
  • Macau was used to double for Shanghai,[9] Slocombe caught fever through June 24—July 7 and could not work - the Slocombe bit isn't really a logical add-on, IMO. I'd go with two separate sentences.
  • Rotten Tomatoes has collected 58 online reviews, which indicated 84% of the critics enjoyed the film - tense confusion: "has collected" but "which indicated".
  • the most cheerfully exciting, bizarre, goofy, romantic adventure movie since "Raiders," - get rid of the quotes and place "Raiders" in italics, no? Otherwise, go with single-quotes as there are double quotes around the whole statement.

That's about all - the GAN will be on hold for a week. Good luck with the changes! —97198 (talk) 04:06, 31 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

All of your suggestion have been put to use. I'm ready when you are ready. —Wildroot (talk) 03:22, 1 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Nice work. I'm happy with all the changes and will promote the article :) —97198 (talk) 06:34, 3 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Elstree Studios are outside London in Borehamwood, and: part of the set for Raiders is at Madam Tousaud's London with the Harrison Ford/Indiana Jones model. —Preceding unsigned comment added by 173.174.83.232 (talk) 23:28, 11 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
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