Talk:Joe 90/GA1

GA Review

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Well-written

• Lead section
  • In opening sentence of opening paragraph, change "...a British 1960s sci-fi television..." to "...a late 1960s British science fiction television..."
  • Add a comma after "inception" in the opening sentence of the third paragraph.
• Plot section
  • In the opening sentence of the lead paragraph, list the dates stated in the sourcing of the Note 2 in the article. Don't make the reader look for it. For the third sentence on "BIG RAT", remarkable is WP:PEACOCK. Remove.
  • In the last sentence of the second paragraph, it tell Joe becoming known as "90" and lists the footnote. Please put this information in the article itself.
  • For the third paragraph, add comma after "organisations" in the lead sentence. In the second sentence, "ingenious" is WP:PEACOCK - remove. For the third sentence about the accurate assumption of the Cold War ending in the 1990s when production was being done in 1968, how did the producers know this? No one did back in 1968. The future is something that no one can predict.
    • Re-worded. SuperMarioMan 16:42, 12 April 2010 (UTC)
  • In the second sentence of the fourth paragraph, the "Eastern Alliance" is mentioned. How far did this alliance stretch geographically? The "Eastern Alliance" would also be mentioned in the original Battlestar Galactica series in the US ten years later. For the third sentence, change "...nuclear technology: in this episode,..." to "...nuclear technology. In that episode,..."
    • First point specified — it is an Asian Eastern Alliance. SuperMarioMan 16:42, 12 April 2010 (UTC)
• Production section
  • For the second sentence change "explains" to "explained" after Gerry Anderson in the lead section.
  • No issues found with the Filming subsection.
  • In the first sentence of the second paragraph of the Design subsection, change "...to Anderson: "The car..." to "to Anderson, who stated that "The car..."
  • For the Puppets subsection, in the last sentence of the opening paragraph, add commas after Turner) and Cooksey).
  • In the Music subsection, add a comma after music in the opening sentence of the lead paragraph. In the second sentence of that paragraph, clarify is the "Sixties" should be capitalized (check WP:MOS regarding capitalization on this). For the final sentence, add commas after badge and gun. In the second sentence of the second paragraph, "instalments" should be spelled "installments". For the last sentence of that paragraph, change "is" to "was"
    • I found nothing on names for decades in the MoS. However, when discussing the political, social and cultural aspects of a decade, I'm sure that capitals are normal — for example, it's "Swinging Sixties" rather than "swinging sixties", and the quotation in question is discussing the theme music as being unquestionably a product of its decade. The source material also capitalises "Sixties". SuperMarioMan 16:42, 12 April 2010 (UTC)
    • "Instalments" with one "l" is fine in this case since the article uses BE spelling. SuperMarioMan 16:42, 12 April 2010 (UTC)
• Voice cast section
  • For Len Jones, in the sentence where Anderson is quoting, change "recall" to "recalled".
  • For Keith Alexander where Topo Gigio is mentioned. What series was Gigio in? Specify since there are some readers who are not familar with British television.
    • It was the US Ed Sullivan Show. SuperMarioMan 16:42, 12 April 2010 (UTC)
  • Change "are" to "were" in the first sentence of the last paragraph. Should Maigret be italicized? in the quote by Files since it was a TV series (WP:MOS on italics would be a good place to check.)
    • In this example, it is the character of Maigret as portrayed by Davies that is being discussed, so I doubt that italics are needed here. SuperMarioMan 16:42, 12 April 2010 (UTC)
• Broadcasting section
  • When did Joe 90 debut on LWT, Southern, and Anglia as mentioned in the lead sentence of the lead paragraph? For the second sentence of that same paragraph, when did it run in Granada.
    • Unfortunately, no relevant source goes into specifics for LWT, Southern and Anglia, only that the series premiered in those regions "shortly after" Midlands and Tyne Tees on September 29. It would therefore probably be early October, but regrettably there is nothing to confirm it. SuperMarioMan 20:37, 12 April 2010 (UTC)
  • In the second paragraph, who believed that the logo for Joe 90 was similar to that of GI JOE? Specify this in the second sentence. For the third sentence, change "The videotapes broadcast were..." to "The videotape broadcasts were..." and add a comma after "film". For the fourth sentence, was Joe 90 run on Nickelodeon in 1994? Clarify and list.
• Reception section
  • In the first sentence of the lead paragraph, change "question" to "questioned" after Peel.
  • In the lead sentence of the second paragraph, changed "praises" to "praised" after Lane. Also who perceived the resurgence of Joe 90? Specify. In mentioning critic Stephen La Rivière, please put his full name in the Design section, paragraph 2, and at the start of the second sentence instead of where it is mentioned. All you need is La Rivière. Change "suggesting" to "suggested" in the fourth sentence of the second paragraph. For the final paragraph, list when the Spy Kids film triology were released and list how long the Alex Rider novels have been released.
  • For the first sentence of the third paragraph, change "notes" to "noted". In the fourth sentence, have ... before and after [Anderson's] in the quotation. In the final sentence of the third paragraph, change "...previous productions: he challenges..." to "...previous challenges. Peel challenges..."
    • The source material runs, "It is hardly coincidental that these tend to be the least-loved of his (i.e. "Gerry Anderson's") series ..." There is no ellipsis of text (so no need for "..."), it is just that leaving "his" in the quotation does not make it absolutely clear that Anderson is being discussed. SuperMarioMan 16:42, 12 April 2010 (UTC)
  • In the first sentence of the fourth paragraph, change "is" to "was" and change "glasses: "Suddenly..." to "glasses, stating "Suddenly...". For the the second sentence, change "the 1960s," to "1968". Add - between then and John in the final paragraph.
  • For the first sentence of the fifth paragraph, change "...youth: "Through..." to "youth, remarking "Through..." In the second sentence, how can you be certain of what was said? It sounds specualtive and WP:WEASEL. Please clarify this. Change "concerns" to "concerned" in the fourth sentence. On the fifth sentence, change "is" to "was" and italicize Joe 90. Also, how can Cook believe the plot in 1990 when the Plot sources in the lead sentence list three separate dates? Clarify this.
    • The second sentence of the fifth paragraph (the asserted link between the BIG RAT and the modern-day Internet) is just a summary, referenced, of what the source material has to say on this. Cook comments on p.97 of the book in question: "His neural downloading of of vast amounts of electronically stored data interestingly prefigures our own contemporary utopia of the Internet and the dream of instantaneous access to a global storehouse of information and knowledge via computer." SuperMarioMan 16:42, 12 April 2010 (UTC)
    • It doesn't seem to me that Cook is making any confident assumptions as to the time setting of the series, only that 1990, as imagined from 1968, was far in the future, and that having a character called "90" tapped into that fascination with the future. Exactly how far into the (then) future the series is set is a highly debatable point, however. SuperMarioMan 16:42, 12 April 2010 (UTC)
• Adaptation section
  • Does "Super Space Theater" need to be italiczed as listed in the second sentence of the lead paragraph?
  • In the first sentence of the second paragraph, when did PolyGram, ITV plc, Carlton, and Granada own Joe 90? Please list when this took place. For the last sentence, please change "..be developed: in 2005,..." to "...be developed. In 2005,..."
    • Rights ownership sourced and clarified. SuperMarioMan 16:42, 12 April 2010 (UTC)
  • For the second paragraph of the last sentence, list Garth as being played by American actor Dana Carvey. In the last sentence of the paragraph, spell out what "idents" are.
    • Changed to "logos", which are essentially what "idents" are. SuperMarioMan 16:42, 12 April 2010 (UTC)
• Merchandise Section
  • In the lead sentence of the lead paragraph, change "include" to "included".
  • For the VHS and DVD subsection, change "surfaced" either to "debutted" or "appeared" after A&E in North America in the second sentence of the second paragraph, and verify that the Region 4 Special Features are the same as Region 2.
    • The material is identical, as the web source for that column states. SuperMarioMan 16:42, 12 April 2010 (UTC)

Factually accurate

• Put the bibliography first before proceeeding to the rest of the cited section. There are several names mentioned here that are listed in the footnotes and should be done for clarity.
• Several links listed in the Secondary sources either have connection or deadlink issues. They are link 1, 2, 14, 19, 42, 47, 51, 54, 60, 62, 63, and 75. Please fix ASAP.
  • I'm not experiencing problems with these references on my computer — the link checker tool indicates no such connection or deadlink issues. On the basis of WP:LINKROT, most of these references have "archiveurls" linking to caches on the WebCitation site, which can prove to be slow to load or non-operational from time to time. The other archiving service used, Internet Archive's Wayback Machine, also can't always be relied on to load quickly. The standard, non-archived web links themselves are still live. SuperMarioMan 16:42, 12 April 2010 (UTC)

Broad in coverage

• No issues.

Neutral

• No issues.

Stable

• Last edit prior to review was on 9 April.

Images

• All images are valid.

Overall

• Hold. Needs some work and clarification, but it can be done.

Reviewer: - Chris (talk) 21:10, 11 April 2010 (UTC)

• After review of the article, it has passed for GA. Good job. Chris (talk) 13:07, 13 April 2010 (UTC)