Talk:John Galsworthy/GA1

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GA Review[edit]

Passed. 750h+ 12:38, 12 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]

The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.

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Nominator: Tim riley (talk · contribs) 09:54, 22 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: 750h+ (talk · contribs) 09:41, 12 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]


@Tim riley: i'll be taking this one. 750h+ 09:41, 12 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]

prose[edit]

lede
  • "Born to a prosperous upper-middle-class family, Galsworthy was destined for a career as a lawyer, but found it uncongenial and turned instead to writing." comma unneeded in british english
    • See p. 249 of the current edition of Modern English Usage: I agree that "that stops should not be used unless they are needed" but can be used to help the reader's eye along the desired path. Tim riley talk 11:56, 12 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
life and career
  • "His biographer David Holloway comments that in describing a character in a 1930 short story, Galsworthy was in fact describing his schoolboy self" remove "in fact".
  • "legal education by studying aspects of maritime law at close quarters with a view to specialising in it once back at home." ==> "legal education by studying aspects of maritime law at close quarters to specialise in it once back at home."
  • "Until the death of John Galsworthy senior in 1904, Ada and Galsworthy kept their relationship secret, because a scandal would have distressed the old man greatly." remove the comma.
  • "Galsworthy published his first work of fiction in 1897, when he was aged 30." remove the comma
  • "The marriage, which was childless, lasted until his death." ==> "The childless marriage lasted until his death."
    • But the unchildless one didn't? Better as it is. Tim riley talk 11:56, 12 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • "In 1912 and 1913 he carried on an effective campaign in the cause of humane slaughtering of animals killed for food." ==> "In 1912 and 1913 he carried on an effective campaign for the cause of the humane slaughtering of animals killed for food."
    • Unexpected suggestion of pronoun. Not an improvement in my view, but I don't mind changing it. Tim riley talk 11:56, 12 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
      • Now I look again, perhaps it could usefully be pruned to "In 1912 and 1913 he carried on an effective campaign for the humane slaughtering ...". What think you?
  • "It was well and widely reviewed, although it did only modestly at the box-office." should there be a hyphen between "box" and "office"?
    • Depends which dictionary you consult. My two default dictionaries are the OED and Chambers: one hyphenates the word and the other doesn't. Tim riley talk 11:56, 12 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • "...which he declined, on the grounds that "no artist of Letters ought..." ==> ""which he declined, because "no artist of Letters ought..."
    • I think the existing wording makes it clearer that this was Galsworthy's view rather than an objective fact, as the proposed rewording suggests. Tim riley talk 11:56, 12 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • "In accordance with his will, his ashes were scattered from an aeroplane over the South Downs." ==> "Per/Under his will, his ashes were scattered from an aeroplane over the South Downs."
    • Certainly not "per": I agree with old dictum "Prefer good English to bad Latin". "Under" looks a bit odd to me. Tim riley talk 11:56, 12 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
works
  • "hypocrisy, selfishness and exploitation of the poor and of women of all classes"
    Wait I strikethroughed the wrong "of", I meant to strikethrough the other "of". 750h+ 12:19, 12 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Not all Galsworthy's plays are of this kind." ==> "Not all of Galsworthy's plays are of this kind."
    • Why the otiose extra word? See the current Fowler, p. 36. Tim riley talk 11:56, 12 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]

image review[edit]

  • Images are fine and are appropriately licensed. some have WP:ALT text. If you could ensure that all of the images have alt text that'd be great. 750h+ 10:07, 12 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
    • Absolutely! I've added alt text to the two images where it was missing. Tim riley talk 12:00, 12 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]

source review[edit]

i'll be spot checking this version if that's all right.

  • 2 OK
  • Holloway source of 7 OK
  • 8 OK
  • 9 OK
  • 12 OK
  • 16 OK
  • 25 OK
  • 38 OK. I've verified that via Newspapers.com.
  • 41 OK
  • 63 OK
  • 68 OK
  • 69 OK
  • 98 OK
  • 105 OK

Ok i'm happy with the sourcing :). 750h+ 10:27, 12 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]

verdict[edit]

  • Okay so a lot of these suggestions were just my stupidity. unless you have any other comments Tim riley, i'd be happy to pass this article for GA. 750h+ 12:24, 12 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
    • Nothing whatever to do with stupidity! We'd just write the same text rather differently, that's all. Glad of your thoughts on my suggestion for a small nip and tuck of one bit, though. And I concur with your amended suggestion for the stricken "of". Tim riley talk 12:36, 12 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
      Thanks for the response, Tim :). Passing. 750h+ 12:37, 12 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
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