Talk:Kalamazoo-class monitor/GA1
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Reviewer: Hahc21 (talk · contribs) 17:03, 5 January 2013 (UTC)
- Lead
- All fine here
- Contruction
- "Construction began on the ships" Isn't better two turn it around and say "construction of the ships began"?
- "in late 1863 and early 1864" --> "'between late 1863 and early 1864" would be better?
- "they were still building" this "they" refers to the ship or to the shipyards? if it refers to the ships, the "been built" will fit better.
- "to new several new ship naming" is it necessary to say "new" twice?
- Final comments