Talk:Kassian Cephas/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: _EricLeb⁰¹ (Page | Talk) 17:57, 22 August 2010 (UTC)

Hello, I'll be reviewing this article against the GA criteria. Sorry for the long delay; I know how you feel.

Review

GA review (see here for criteria)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS):

   A few problems to take care of:
   - "His photography business was not the only one established in the area during this time period." -> This is a little vague as to what it's trying to imply. Did he have competition? Was the photography business booming at the time?
   - "A blue velvet book covered with gold and diamonds covering the performance was presented as a gift on the occasion..." -> I'm assuming the book had Cephas work in it, but that's not very clear. I also think you should remove "covered with gold and diamonds" to make it more coherent.
   - I was bold and fixed a few other issues related to MoS and structure.

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

   - Are you able to provide quotes for your citations? It would be appreciated, but I'll take your word for your claims if you can't.
   - ISBNs for your final two book references are the same.

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

   - "This allowed the subjects to be photographed more quickly rather than having to remain still for several moments." -> I don't think details relating to his camera's shutter speed (aside from the shutter speed itself) is really relevant.
   - Final two sentences in "Personal life" seem irrelevant to Cephas, but seeing the lack of an article (or future article, for that matter) for them, I suppose it's fine.

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

   "Although both Cephas and his son were accomplished court photographers, Cephas was the most important of the two..." -> I'm unable to access the source, so this sounds a little non-neutral. Care to offer a quote?

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

   Arsonal is the sole major contributor, nothing else to say here.

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

   All images have expired copyrights and are in the public domain.

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

   On hold for seven days to address or respond to these concerns. Strike out whenever they are complete. Feel free to ask any questions here, as I am watching the page. Regards. _EricLeb⁰¹ (Page | Talk) 19:12, 22 August 2010 (UTC)

   Failed due to failure to respond to concerns in the allotted time. Renominate when taken care of. _EricLeb⁰¹ (Page | Talk) 23:53, 29 August 2010 (UTC)