Talk:Laurentia Tan/GA1

GA Review

Lead

• "At the 2008 Summer Paralympics, she won Singapore's first two medals at the Paralympic Games, both bronze medals in dressage." This line is repeated in more detail at the end of the second par. It also feels a little out of place. I would simply remove it, but am happy to hear of any comments you have.
  • Fixed. — JackLee, 12:40, 2 October 2008 (UTC)

Early years

• What's an Elizabeth Dyson Prize?
  • Comment: I can't find anything specific on it in relation to Tan, just the fact that she received it, but the webpage http://www.maryhare.org.uk/?id=speechday_secondary states that in 2007 it was awarded "for progress and achievement". When Tan received it I suppose it was for the same purpose, but this is speculation. Do you think this is worth mentioning in the article? — JackLee, 12:40, 2 October 2008 (UTC)
    • I would leave it in, but try and explain why she won it, even if simply it says "she won an ED Prize for "progress and achievement" ..." It's an interesting fact and worth keeping. Peanut4 (talk) 13:13, 2 October 2008 (UTC)
  • Fixed! — JackLee, 15:02, 2 October 2008 (UTC)

Medals

• Is there any reason for specific dates for the top two medals but not the rest?
  • Comment: Couldn't find out the specific dates for the other medals from the sources, unfortunately. :( — JackLee, 12:40, 2 October 2008 (UTC)

Only a couple of points, so I'll put it on hold for now. Peanut4 (talk) 21:24, 1 October 2008 (UTC)

Hello, nice to be in touch again, and thanks for the barnstar! — Cheers, JackLee ^–talk– 12:40, 2 October 2008 (UTC)

GA review (see here for criteria)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Another nice GA from yourself. Good luck with any future expansion. Peanut4 (talk) 15:54, 2 October 2008 (UTC)

Woo hoo! Thanks very much. — Cheers, JackLee ^–talk– 16:33, 2 October 2008 (UTC)