Talk:Lina Leandersson/GA1

GA Review

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Here's my comments/questions:

• Unlink the date in the lead.

• Done for the DOB, the other one links to 2008 in film. Should I unlink that as well?
  • No, links like that can be used.

• Could you expand the lead a little? Maybe with some information from "Early life and career" and "Personal life".

• Yeah, I have tried to do that.

• attending drama courses, street- and jazz dance – Shouldn't this say something like "attending drama courses, and performing street- and jazz dance"?

  Yeah, you're right. I think that's more or less been there since I created the article.

• Ref 1 and 4 needs to be merged because they are the same article.

• Actually, ref 1 was a link to an "Infobox" of sorts, that appeared next to the main article. I used that as a source for the place of birth. Unfortunately the link is dead now. I'll try to work it out.
  • Yeah, but that infobox is included in ref 4 so you might as well replace ref 1 with that. :)
    • Ah, the infobox has been upgraded since I last looked at it. Merged references.

• One of her first roles was an amateur theatre performance as the mother of a spoiled girl wanting new jeans.

• Done, changed to "... was 'in an amateur theatre performance as ..."

• Nickelodeon's programledarskola is a television show so it should be italicized.

• Yeah.

• Unlink "October 2006"

• Check.

• "-40°C" – Use − instead of a hyphen.

• Hmm, I wasn't able to figure out how. Are you sure about this, by the way? Celsius and Kelvin seem to use a regular dash.
  • Fixed it for you.
    • Thanks!

• Leandersson has received several awards, and is currently nominated for a Saturn Award for "Best Performance By a Younger Actor", and a Constellation Award for "Best Female Performance in a 2008 Science Fiction Film". – This is a bit unnecessary as it is already mentioned in the Awards section. I think it's best to remove it.

• How strongly do you feel about this? :) I'm not a fan of the idea that tables and infoboxes effectively replace the prose. I looked at some other actor-bios before adding this, and they seem to briefly mention a few rewards received (e.g Emma Watson). But I'm definitely not "married" to it.
  • OK, it can stay, but can you add references to the paragraph?
    • Done and done.

• In "Personal life", add a link to Falun.

• Done.

• She Leandersson has always liked to dance

• Right.

• The three paragraphs in the "Personal life" section are a bit small. I think it would be better if you merged them into one paragraph.

• Yeah, I agree, but it depends. On my 24" monitor they look small, on my 17" they look ok. Done.

Bra jobbat med artikeln! ;) I will put it on hold for seven days so that you can fix the things above. TheLeftorium 18:03, 11 June 2009 (UTC)

• Tack så jättemycket! I have addressed everything, but maybe not to your liking :) Thanks again, I really appreciate your swift response. decltype (talk) 18:56, 11 June 2009 (UTC)
  • Everything looks good so I will pass the article. Congrats! TheLeftorium 19:45, 11 June 2009 (UTC)