Talk:Long-toed salamander/GA2
GA Review[edit]
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Hi, I am reviewing this article for GA. In general, it seems like a very well written, well referenced article. I have done some copy editing and you are free to revert. I have only a few comments. —Mattisse (Talk) 01:35, 3 July 2009 (UTC)
- Nitpick comments
- "Therefore, A. macrodactylum speciated from A. laterale after the Paleocene ..." - is "speciated" a verb? Speciation is a noun but I have not seen the verb.
- "and after the loss of the Western Interior Seaway, which opened the access route into the Western Cordillera." - this is unclear. Did the loss of the Western Interior Seaway open the route, i.e. provided a land bridge or route?
- "Prior to hatching, while in the egg and as a newborn larvae,..." - is this a case of misplaced commas eg. Prior to hatching while in the egg, and as a newborn larvae,? Or are newborn larvae considered to be "in the egg"?
- "some individuals grow bigger heads and become cannibals to feed upon their own brood mates." - become cannibals to feed? or, become cannibals and feed? to feed sounds deterministic.
- "...some individuals grow bigger heads and become cannibals, feeding upon their own brood mates."
- "Population level diversity is what provides ecosystem services,[65] such as the keystone role that salamanders play in the soil ecosystems, such as nutrient cycling supporting wetland and forested ecosystems." - two "such as" in the same sentence.
- "Forestry, roads, and other land developments that alter the environments that amphibians migrate to have increased mortality." - run-on sentence with two "that"s.
- --> "Forestry, roads, and other land developments have altered the environments that amphibians migrate to, and have increased mortality."
- "For example, the average total area harvested on an annual basis in British Columbia is 7,700 hectares (19,000 acres) per year." - I don't know what to think of this statistic without a comparison.
Extremely interesting article.
—Mattisse (Talk) 01:35, 3 July 2009 (UTC)
Final GA review (see here for criteria)
- It is reasonably well written.
- a (prose): Clearly written b (MoS): Follows MoS
- a (prose): Clearly written b (MoS): Follows MoS
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (references): Well referenced b (citations to reliable sources): Sources are reliable c (OR): No OR
- a (references): Well referenced b (citations to reliable sources): Sources are reliable c (OR): No OR
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): Covers major aspects in context b (focused): Remains focused
- a (major aspects): Covers major aspects in context b (focused): Remains focused
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias: Neutral
- Fair representation without bias: Neutral
- It is stable.
- No edit wars etc.: Stable
- No edit wars etc.: Stable
- It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- Overall: A particularly interesting and comprehensive article
- Pass/Fail: Pass
- Pass/Fail: Pass
Congratulations!