Talk:Love 'Em All/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Freikorp (talk · contribs) 01:26, 20 June 2018 (UTC)

• "from second studio album" - grammar

• Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 03:31, 20 June 2018 (UTC)

• "with Lil' Ronnie and B.A.M" - since B.A.M. doesn't have a Wikipedia article, perhaps we can clarify what this is exactly to the reader in the prose. Is it a single musician/group/duo etc

• He is a producer, and it would kind of silly to put that descriptor in given that the word "produced" is already in the sentence. Aoba47 (talk) 03:31, 20 June 2018 (UTC)

Oh, I meant the term B.A.M. doesn't automatically imply that is a person. It could be the acronym of a group of people. But i'll leave it up to you whether you want to clarify this or not. :) Freikorp (talk) 03:44, 20 June 2018 (UTC)

• "and it peaked on the R&B/Hip-Hop Airplay and Hot R&B/Hip-Hop Songs Billboard charts" - should it be clarified what positions it peaked at? Simply saying it "peaked" made me think it had reached the No. 1 spot. Perhaps just change 'peaked' to 'charted'.

• Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 03:31, 20 June 2018 (UTC)

• "a chair dance" - what's a chair dance? Perhaps say 'dancing on a chair', assuming that's what this means

• Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 03:31, 20 June 2018 (UTC)

• Since there's no articles for Bianca "Blush" Atterberry and J. Schmugge, can you tell us anything at all about them? I understand the sources may not give anything other than their names. Same issue with C Travis Kr8ts.

• I have used the album liner notes so it does not have information beyond that. Aoba47 (talk) 03:31, 20 June 2018 (UTC)

• I'm being picky here, but perhaps add '(pictured)' to Chris Brown's image following his name

• I do not believe that it would be necessary. Adding the parenthesis following his name would be awkward given that it interrupt the possessive. Aoba47 (talk) 03:31, 20 June 2018 (UTC)

• "another typical R&B song that isn’t a car crash" - maybe I'm just not gangsta enough, but what does this actually mean? I mean, I would assume 'car crash' in this context would have the same meaning as describing something as a 'train wreck', so why would someone pan it for not being a car crash?

• I think that "panned" was the wrong word choice on my part. I believe that the critic is saying that the song is fine. It is not car crash/train wreck, but not much to write home about basically. I hope that makes sense. I have revised it accordingly. Aoba47 (talk) 03:31, 20 June 2018 (UTC)

Looks good as always. On hold until minor issues are addressed. Freikorp (talk) 01:26, 20 June 2018 (UTC)

• Thank you for the review! I believe that I have addressed everything. Aoba47 (talk) 03:31, 20 June 2018 (UTC)

• Passing. :) Freikorp (talk) 03:44, 20 June 2018 (UTC)