Talk:Marguerite Littman

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Did you know nomination[edit]

The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 06:41, 17 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

  • Comment: Still under my 5 submission limit; so, do not have a QPQ as of yet for this submission. Will have one completed for a subsequent submission.

Created by Ktin (talk). Self-nominated at 06:54, 8 November 2020 (UTC).[reply]

  • Comment. Please can I request a fellow editor to review this one. Thanks. Ktin (talk) 20:31, 15 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • Hi, do I qualify?
  • Here is a review: New enough, long enough, neutrally written, well referenced, no close paraphrasing seen. I added a "citation needed" tag to the beginning of one very long paragraph where the source would be welcome, and I also tagged the lead as being too short per WP:LEAD; please add more to summarize the article and indicate her notability.
  • I've struck ALT0 because it contains way too many facts, but ALT1 is great. ALT1 hook ref verified and cited inline.
  • Can you find an image? No QPQ needed for nominator with less than 5 DYK credits. Yoninah (talk) 00:50, 16 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • Yoninah, Thanks so much for the review. I was hoping to use the Princess Diana bit since it has more of a global appeal rather than the second one. Happy to work on trimming ALT0 blurb.
ALT2: ... that American-British socialite and HIV/AIDS activist Marguerite Littman had gotten Princess Diana to donate her entire wardrobe for a charity auction that raised over $3 million in 1997?
I expanded the lede and have also added the citation for the first line in that longish paragraph. Unfortunately, could not find a free image that satisfies WP requirements when I had given it a search a couple of days ago.
Cheers and Thanks much! Ktin (talk) 01:07, 16 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • @Ktin: Thank you for expanding the lead and adding the cite. I added a fair-use image from 1987. You could go with ALT2, but it really is top-heavy on the descriptions of Littman and also uses the rather unencyclopedic word gotten. How would you like to shorten it further? Yoninah (talk) 16:57, 16 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • @Yoninah:. Thanks for that image upload. Looks clean! Re: the hook, took a pass at trimming it further. Please see below as ALT3. Cheers. Ktin (talk) 17:15, 16 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]
ALT3: ... that HIV/AIDS activist Marguerite Littman had Princess Diana donate her entire wardrobe for a charity auction that raised over $3 million in 1997?
  • @Ktin: but the source says it was Diana's idea to donate her clothes. If Littman ran the auction, you could say:
  • ALT4: ... that Princess Diana donated her entire wardrobe to a charity auction organized by HIV/AIDS activist Marguerite Littman which raised more than $3 million in 1997? Yoninah (talk) 17:29, 16 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • OK. Approving ALT4 as it's just a rewording of your ALT2. Good to go. Yoninah (talk) 17:40, 16 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]