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"during the IOC's on February 9, 2006." - Looked through the source and you need to clarify that the Marshall Islands' recognition occurred during the IOC's meeting in Turin, Italy on February 9, 2006.
"This was the first olympic appearance for Garstang and the second olympic appearance for Nemra." - reword the second half of this sentence to avoid repetition of "olympic appearance"
For the second "The medals in the event went to athletes from Russia and South Africa." sentence, I think replacing the word "event" with "discipline" would be better for variety
Done
"Haley Nemara competed in the women's 800 meter, where she finished sixth out of seven athletes in her heat." - Haley Nemara participated in the women's 800 meter, where she came sixth out of seven athletes in her heat.
"Ann-Marie Hepler competed in the women's 50 meter freestyle, where she finished third in her heat and placed forty-ninth in the standings" - Ann-Marie Hepler partook in the women's 50 meter freestyle, where she placed third in her heat and ranked forty-ninth in the standings.