Talk:McCormick Foundation

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This is my first article and I was trying to do a thorough job. I did not mean for it to appear like an advertiment. I am working on adding in links to other Wiki pages. (ChicagoConTrib (talk) 21:51, 22 July 2010 (UTC))[reply]

As reviewing administrator, I placed a tag on it to prevent deletion for a few days. I suggest you do the following

1. Read our guide to writing Wikipedia articles. and learn how we do references and headings
2. Remove all adjectives of praise . They are not compatible with an encyclopedic tone. Don't use vague buzzwords, like "partners with" or "invests in" say what the foundation does--do they make grants? to whom?
3. Use references s providing substantial coverage from 3rd party independent published reliable sources, print or online, but not blogs or press releases, or material derived from press releases. There should be some more newspaper articles to find.
4. Don;t give general background about why the programs addressed by the foundation are important. Just say as simply as possible what they do. Avoid mentioning the name of the foundation or the donor after the first use. The proper phrase is "the foundation," in lower case.
5 Numbers would help show importance: assets? grants? DGG ( talk ) 01:25, 23 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

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You need to find reliable third party references the foundations website is NOT sufficientTeapotgeorge^Talk 14:32, 23 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for your advice and help, I really appreciate it and will work on making these suggestions. ChicagoConTrib (talk) 16:12, 23 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]