Talk:Momčilo Đujić/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Tomobe03 (talk · contribs) 18:54, 4 August 2013 (UTC)

I'll review this article shortly.--Tomobe03 (talk) 18:54, 4 August 2013 (UTC)

• There is one duplicate link in the article: United States. Please remove redundant one per WP:OVERLINK
  • Done.
• No disambiguation links (no action required)
• Checklinks reports no external link problems (no action required)
• Two commons-hosted images have appropriate licences and captions (no action required)
• Momčilo Đujić.jpg non-free image has partial non-free use rationale provided. I'm afraid NFCC#4 is not met here: WP:NFCCP states that "Non-free content must have been published or publicly displayed outside Wikipedia", but the rationale provided indicates no source. Please indicate source or replace/remove the image.
  • Replaced with crop of commons image.
• Reported nickname "Father of Fire" is neither an accurate translation of "Pop vatra" nor reflecting "Father Fire" reported by Binder.
  • Modified to "Father Fire" per source.
• Please provide source that he attended primary school in Knin or that were indeed his brothers and sisters as indicated in the "Early life" section. Binder is provided in the section, but Binder only supports "Boško" and does not speak of Knin.
  • Removed relatives and Knin education.
• The "Early life" section says Đujić left school (inferring secondary school in Šibenik) to attend seminary in Sremski Karlovci. On the other hand Binder says that he went to Sremski Karlovci when he was 22 - not saying specifically he left school, which is not that surprising at 22. Could you provide a reference for the school leaving, indicate his age when moving to Sremski Karlovci.
  • Done.
• In "Priest and anti-Yugoslavianism" section, could you please provide a reference for Strmica posting, and sons and daughters being born there. The single reference available in the section does not support the claims.
  • Removed.

Suspending the review briefly - will resume later today.--Tomobe03 (talk) 08:51, 6 August 2013 (UTC) Resuming:

• In WWII section, do "Croatian nationalist forces" refer to Ustaše or regular NDH army/police or someone else? I am aware that Binder uses the exact same phrase, but is there a way to clarify this?
  • Couldn't figure who it specifically refers to.
• In the same section, there is ... possibility for Serb refugees to return safely to their homes... - could you clarify what refugees since the preceding prose does not mention any?
  • Added context.
• In the same sentence as the previous item, there's ...repealing of a degree authorizing the confiscation of Serb-owned property... - I assume that's a typo of "decree".
  • Fixed.
• The same sentence is fully supported by the source, but it is copied nearly verbatim from Ramet, perhaps it would be wise to rephrase it to avoid Close paraphrasing.
  • Fixed.
• Google books returns zero hits on "Đujić Pađeni" but other sources like this one and especially this one place him in July-August 1941 firmly in Knin area. Could it be that the village referred to as Pađeni was actually Pađene where his HQ was located in August 1941? Not sure on this one, but it sure looks suspicious.
  • It says Pađeni in Hoare 2006, p. 135, but given your arguments its probably a typo. Hoare likewise put him in Knin at the time and Đujić discusses Pađene in his letter to Fehn later on in the article. Changed to Pađene.
• According to Đujić: "We were under... would probably be better off clarified as something like Đujić sad that "[Dinara Division] was under..." No dealbreaker though.
  • Done
• If the 373rd Division referred to in the prose is the 373rd (Croatian) Infantry Division (Wehrmacht), please wikilink it.
  • Done
• In 1945, Yugoslavia's requests for Đujić's extradition were repeatedly rejected by the US government. implies Đujić was in the States in 1945, but the prose does not say so. Is there any sourced info on his whereabouts in 1945-46?
  • Removed. Not in source given. I cannot recall where I read this.
• In However, he remained strongly opposed to the Communist regime in Yugoslavia. Afterwards, Đujić retired to San Marcos, where he wrote poems and jokes that were published in both the United States and Serbia. "Afterwards" seems unclear and begs question: After what?
  • Removed.
• It would be a very welcome addition if you could add just a couple of details on the trial: - What was he convicted of specifically, and what was the sentence? Conviction of war crimes may range from "slap on the wrist" to death sentence - so those details would be quite welcome.
  • Added some details.

Nice reading. The article requires only few tiding up and only a few referencing-related interventions to pass (in addition to the NFCC#4 issue). Great job!--Tomobe03 (talk) 15:36, 6 August 2013 (UTC)

Edited one bit of prose to reflect sources more closely. Otherwise happy to pass. Good work!--Tomobe03 (talk) 07:28, 11 August 2013 (UTC)

Was there any particular reason to ignore all (except one) issues I described in the section below?--Antidiskriminator (talk) 07:38, 11 August 2013 (UTC)