Talk:Myra Virginia Simmons

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Feedback[edit]

Hi Serenewilliams, I have some feedback for you regarding this article:

  • Per Wikipedia policies, the subjects of biographies should always be referred to by their surnames. Using the first name alone is viewed as too "familiar".
  • Make sure you always have a space after a reference and the beginning of the next sentence. I see two instances of this in the Personal life section
  • Wikipedia articles generally avoid euphemisms such as "passed away". Instead, use the word "died", which is neutral.
  • Avoid references to relative time. The article as you wrote it may be largely unchanged in five years, for example, making phrases such as "which can be seen in a recent article" confusing for the reader.
  • Aunt is not a proper noun in this context and should not be capitalized
  • You have duplicated references. For example, the ref "Colored Suffragist Rally Will Be Held". The San Francisco Call. October 9, 1911" appears in the reference section twice. If you look at an article such as this one, you'll see that each reference is only listed once. The little letters before the reference indicate the places where the reference is used and link to that place in the text. The more letters a reference has, the more times it has been cited.
    • To fix this, you'll need to reuse a citation. So remove the citation, then click "cite", then click the "reuse" tab on the popup box. You'll be able to select from all the citations currently in use in the article, or search for a specific one.
  • It appears she never married and did not have children this smells like what we call "original research", AKA it's a conclusion you reached on your own. If you want to include this content in the article, it needs to be stated in a reliable source that she did not marry nor have children. If you cannot find a reliable source, you should remove this sentence.
  • "Progressive Era" is a proper noun and should be capitalized
  • Chair of the Women’s Civic and Progressive league I imagine that "league" is also part of the proper noun and should also be capitalized
  • San Quentin prison is only mentioned in the lead. The lead is supposed to be a synopsis of the rest of the article, so you shouldn't have content that is present in the lead that isn't also present in the body.
  • In general, I think this article would benefit by the introduction of more links. The Suffrage work section has only one link, while the "Political work post-suffrage" section has no links.

Let me know if you have questions about any of this feedback! Elysia (Wiki Ed) (talk) 22:11, 24 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]