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Reviewer: Aoba47 (talk · contribs) 17:23, 30 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

  • Grabbing this for a review; I will have my comments up in a couple days if that is okay with you. Aoba47 (talk) 17:23, 30 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Lead and infobox[edit]

  • Provide a subtitle for the image in the infobox.
  • Insert “the” before “hidden character”.
  • Can you introduce Alan Ayckbourn and Mike Leigh? I was not familiar with each of these two men before reading the article so a brief descriptive term/title before the person's name would be helpful. I am probably not familiar with these names as I am an American, but I feel that is always important to absolutely clear.
  • I would suggest you do the same for Abigail’s Party (such as clarifying that is a play).

Writing[edit]

  • Make sure to include an alt. for both images (the Reece Shearsmith and Lorraine Ashbourne images).
    • I'm never sure what to put in these, so I've just gone for the actors' names. Is that right? (I've also added one for the episode poster.) Josh Milburn (talk) 21:26, 30 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • The phrase ”was upped” sounds a little too informal so I would suggest using something stronger.
  • Clarify that Absent Friends is a play.

Casting and characters[edit]

  • Add a descriptive phrase in front of Life is Sweet and Benidorm for a reader unfamiliar with either topic.

Filming and direction[edit]

  • I understand the meaning behind “basically as-was”, but it sounds a little awkward and I think there is a stronger way of phrasing this.
    • That's fair- I've gone for "Scenes in a bedroom used the room mostly as the production team found it." How's that? Josh Milburn (talk) 21:26, 30 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • Otherwise, great work with the “Production” section overall.

Plot[edit]

Analysis[edit]

  • The sentence construction with the Chris Bennion’s quote is slightly awkward and also the meaning of “this” is not obvious so clarify this point.
    • Yes, I see. I've rejigged it slightly; hopefully it is now clearer. Josh Milburn (talk) 21:26, 30 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • Remove the “do” in between “than” and “Jim and Angela”.
  • Otherwise, great work.

Reception[edit]

Great work; I have nothing to suggest here.

Final comments[edit]

  • @J Milburn: I am very impressed with the work put into this article; I only have a few minor suggestions to offer in my review. Once you address my comments, this should be a quick and easy pass. Aoba47 (talk) 20:15, 30 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]
    • Thanks so much for taking the time to have a look at the article, your kind comments, and your very good suggestions. I have, I hope, dealt with everything. Josh Milburn (talk) 21:26, 30 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]
      • Thank you for your quick responses to my comments. You have done awesome work with this page. ✓ Pass Aoba47 (talk) 21:55, 30 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]
GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:
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