Talk:National Museum of Flight

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Still a Stub-Class article:[edit]

Still not quite up to Start-Class, because there are still substantial issues needing to be dealt with, including adequate referencing.

Statements like "The museum collections have expanded into one of the most important in the UK" and "The museum is significant in that it is the only UK national museum still collecting the history of commercial aviation" need to be properly qualified - eg: who says so and why? - and referenced, preferably with an external source so it does not sound like advertising on behalf of the museum.

Avoid statements like "Of these, the Cygnet and Provost flew into the museum", " the de Havilland Comet also flew into the museum..." implying either some clever flying or a nasty accident, particularly with the Comet; Surely the Cygnet, Provost and Comet were flown to the museum?

The "History" section jumps from the 1920s to 1968, leaving readers wondering what happened during the intervening forty years.

As yet there is no bibliography; it is preferable to note a published reference in an inline citation (eg: Strorer 1983, p. 8) and show the book in a bibliography, eg:

Benzies, AR (1975). Scotland Scanned 75, Central Scotland Aviation Group.

- better still-

Benzies, A R (ed.) Scotland Scanned 75. Edinburgh: Central Scotland Aviation Group, 1975. ISBN 0950389012 Parameter error in {{ISBN}}: checksum

rather than using inline citations as the bibliography. Although there are some inline citations none of them show page numbers.

The museum website can be a useful source of information, but excessive use of the website can be construed as Wikipedia:Spam: I would recommend using the main link once, but find other, if possible published information rather than relying almost exclusively on the Museum's site for information.

I hope these comments may be of some help. Minorhistorian (talk) 00:00, 28 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]