Talk:Osbert Parsley/GA1
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Reviewer: Aza24 (talk · contribs) 08:09, 6 January 2022 (UTC)
Happy to review this—comments soon. Aza24 (talk) 08:09, 6 January 2022 (UTC)
- Admittedly, I find the life section hard to read when there is also a "Musical career at Norwich Cathedral" one. I do wonder if they can be combined, as I believe it would improve both continuity and readability considerably
- I've combined the two sections, let me know what you think. AM
Lead[edit]
- Are we sure it shouldn't be "composer and singer" (in terms of order for which is primary), that's what Grove has at least
- Done (interesting idea, not entirely convinced) AM
- Short description is "Musician and composer" when it should probably match whatever you do with the first sentence
- Sorted. AM
- Recommend linking parish (in the lead and body text). I am thinking rites should link to something, but not sure what that would be too
- I wonder if "He died in Norwich in 1585 and was buried in Norwich Cathedral" might work better in the second paragraph. Then the commemorative plaque might flow from it better
- Good idea, done. AM
- That he wrote both Latin and English rites seems inextricably tied to the fact that his career...
- I would advise against linking to "England" throughout, though if you're doing it to separate the kingdom from modern times, I suppose I understand that
- Advice taken. AM
Life[edit]
- Is the attribution in "The Oxford Dictionary of National Biography states that in" necessary? It feels out of place, as I presume the ODB is citing land ownership documents
- Agreed, now sorted. AM
- "Details of Osbert Parsley's life first appeared in Henry Davey's History of English Music" — Grove seems to indicate that details of his life were known from the plaque, which presumably was known of because the Davey publication?
- True, so sentence amended to reflect this. AM
Musical career[edit]
- The link to composer seems unneeded
- Link deleted. AM
- Since Te Deum is a hymn (so basically a song), it probably needs quotation marks rather than italicization
- Done throughout. AM
- IMO the image of the Norwich quires is so nice that you might considering enlarging it with "upright=1.3" or something similar
- Done. AM
- I am finding little to comment on regarding this section. It seems a bit more put together than the life one, perhaps another reason to combine them :)
- I'll continue the review soon. Best – Aza24 (talk) 06:30, 9 January 2022 (UTC)
Done Above comments now addressed. Amitchell125 (talk) 09:46, 10 January 2022 (UTC)
Composing career[edit]
- I feel that the "During the decades" paragraph can be combined with the earlier one
- Done. AM
"polyphonic music was no longer allowed to be composed"—I find this hard to believe as written. Could it be that highly polyphonic music was not permitted?
- Sorted. AM
Link The Musical Times
- Done. AM
- The "Parsley's Clock composition" sentence seems out of place for a "List of compositions" section, I recommend it be moved above
- Done. AM
- I feel like the "List of compositions" and Existing manuscripts should be in the same section, perhaps you could have:
==List of compositions==
===Overview=== (or no heading at all?)
===Existing manuscripts===
- Done (big improvement imo). AM
- You could even have this all under the composing career section, but keeping the list of compositions apart from the existing manuscripts is rather odd
- I've avoided this, because of the titles structure already in place. AM
Refs[edit]
- Your Grove refs are formatted differently, and they don't have any url-access=subscription like other refs. You might also like to add {{Grove Music subscription}} ((subscription or UK public library membership required)) to them
- Done. A.
- Looks great otherwise, putting on hold
- @Aza24: All sorted now. Amitchell125 (talk) 08:29, 15 January 2022 (UTC)