Talk:Otto Kittel/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: JonCatalán^(Talk) 16:00, 4 October 2010 (UTC)

Comments: Comments on the text and the review will come soon. Before commenting I will read the article and copyedit where I believe is fit. Feel free to revert anything you believe inappropriate.

• I copyedited the text a bit, mostly reducing redundancies and marginally improving the flow. All in all, the text is concise and clear, and the article comes off as complete to a layman to the topic, such as myself.
• Some things regarding the references:

1. Page rangers are shown with an en dash (the shorter one), not an emdash; by the way, the same goes for dates. In fact, all ranges between numbers are shown with an en dash. I changed the dates, but not the references (forgot to do them when I was copyediting). Done
2. Sources listed in the bibliography but unused in the referencing of the article need to be moved to a "further reading" section. This includes sources such as Bergström 2007, Bergstrom 2003, Helden der Wehrmacht II 2003, et cetera. Done

• The article seems neutral, although you tend to use words like "score" a lot, which come off as slightly biased towards the pilot. However, I figure this is common language for topics revolving around aerial warfare during the Second World War. The only thing I would say to keep in mind is sympathy towards the Soviet victims. Done
• File:Emil Lang Oak Leaves.jpg is copyright protected. Since you have a free image of Kittel, I'm not sure the fair use tag is justified in this case. Done

Otherwise, the article looks good. Once the above is taken care of I can go ahead and promote the article to GA. JonCatalán^(Talk) 17:25, 4 October 2010 (UTC)

Awesome! Give me a minute or two to promote. JonCatalán^(Talk) 18:22, 4 October 2010 (UTC)