Talk:Population and Community Development Association/GA1

GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: Neelix (talk · contribs) 18:29, 3 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Tick list[edit]

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

Is it reasonably well written?
A. Prose quality:

B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
A. References to sources:

B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:

C. No original research:
Is it broad in its coverage?
A. Major aspects:

B. Focused:
Is it neutral?
Fair representation without bias:
Is it stable?
No edit wars, etc:
Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:

B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
Overall:
Pass or Fail:

Comments[edit]

Incoming links - There are not enough articles on Wikipedia that link to this one. Neelix (talk) 19:26, 3 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

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Lede - All information in the lede should appear in the body of the article. The sources for the information in the lede should be provided where that information appears in the body rather than where that information appears in the lede. Neelix (talk) 19:26, 3 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

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Founder - This section should not be mostly, let alone entirely, sourced by the person about whom it is written. Neelix (talk) 19:26, 3 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

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Strategies - This section should be rewritten paragraphically and more thoroughly sourced. Neelix (talk) 19:26, 3 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

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Role of Thai government - I agree with Prof M Johnson above that "Relationship with Thai government" is a more fitting title for this section. Neelix (talk) 19:26, 3 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

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Sections relating to issues being targeted - The "Women's health and maternity," "HIV and AIDS," and "Poverty reduction" sections should be grouped in a subheading called "Services" or something similar. Neelix (talk) 19:26, 3 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

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Women's health and maternity - This section relies entirely on a single source. More references should be added. The first two sentences of this section are not written from a neutral point of view. Neelix (talk) 19:26, 3 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

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Unwanted pregnancies - This should be a subheading using ='s rather than bolding. There are a large number of weasel words in this section that should be replaced or removed. Examples include "alarming statistic," "quacks," and the use of the term "abortion" in the background paragraph replaced by the term "termination" in the paragraphs dealing with the PDA. The sentence-long paragraphs should be consolidated into a single paragraph and sourced. Neelix (talk) 19:26, 3 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

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HIV and AIDS - The first two paragraphs of this section belong on the HIV/AIDS in Thailand article. Background information should be limited to that which is directly related to the PDA by the sources. Neelix (talk) 19:26, 3 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

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Criticism - This section should be expanded. Neelix (talk) 19:26, 3 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

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See also - This section contains many links that are too far removed from the topic of this article to justify inclusion.

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Spelling - There are multiple spelling errors in the article that should be fixed. Neelix (talk) 19:26, 3 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

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Images - Relevant images should be found and included. Neelix (talk) 19:26, 3 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I see no significant edits in the article since the review, and with no sign of life here, I suggest failing due to no activity. --_{Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| talk to me} 21:34, 16 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]