Talk:Puckpool Battery

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The source [1] does not seem compatible with Wikipedia's license, and I'm afraid that the history section of this article follows far too closely on it. Information and structure follow generally, but consider especially passages such as the following, from the article:

Article: The battery was completed in 1865 with seven rows of mortars, three to a row with five light guns to cover the beach. In 1867 the Defence Committee again considered the battery ....
Source: The battery was supposedly completed in 1865 with seven rows of mortars, three to a row with five light guns to cover the beach, but in 1867 the Defence Committee again considered the battery....

Article: The idea was later abandoned however and in 1888 under the provisions of the Imperial Defence Loan two 10.4-inch R.M.L. guns were proposed for the battery and were in place by 1892 on protected barbette carriages. These were originally intended for Gibraltar and were the only two examples of this type to be mounted in the UK.
Source: The idea was abandoned and in 1888 under the provisions of the Imperial Defence Loan two 10.4-inch R.M.L. guns were proposed for Puckpool. These were in place by 1892 on protected barbette carriages. These were originally intended for Gibraltar and were the only examples of this type of mounting in the UK.

This content needs to be rewritten so that it does not follow too closely on the original in structure and language. --Moonriddengirl ^(talk) 17:26, 6 May 2010 (UTC)[reply]