Talk:Pumpkin bomb/GA1

GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 01:32, 26 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I'll get to this in a little bit.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 01:32, 26 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Don't capitalize the 'P' in the caption
- De-capped. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 27 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Add this to the lede to better explain their purpose right away: The pumpkin bomb was a close but non-nuclear replication of the Fat Man plutonium bomb with the same ballistic and handling characteristics. That same phrase is duplicated twice in the main body so clean that up.
- Done and done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 27 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]
The main problem is in paragraphs two through four in the development section.
Explain bomb shape or change it to just "bomb".
Typo: demonstrated that the Fat man
- Corrected. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 27 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Typo: "on" 509th Composite Group in 20, 23, 26
- Corrected. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 27 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Use an endash for page ranges, not a hyphen.
- Groan. Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 27 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]
The infobox says 6,000lbs of filler, but the description para says 6,300lbs.
- Corrected to 6,300 lbs, per source.
You've got a fair number of overlinks.
- It seems that the duplicate link checker is working again, so I have swept them up. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 27 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]
No DABs and the pic is appropriately licensed.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 18:36, 27 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]
All points addressed. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 27 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]