Talk:Pygmy slow loris/GA1
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Reviewer: FunkMonk (talk · contribs) 17:27, 3 March 2013 (UTC)
- Welcome! First, the intro says "crawling along branches using slow, deliberate movements in search of prey." Why should it be pointed out that the movements are deliberate? Seems like common sense.
- "has virtually no tail." It seems a bit vague. Wouldn't "a very short tail", or a measurement be more accurate?
- "The teeth on its lower jaw" wouldn't "in" its lower jaw be more accurate?
- "Urine scent markings have a strong characteristic odor and are an important means of communication." If it is plural, shouldn't "an" be removed?
- There are a lot of good photos on Commons[1], why use such a blurry one in the taxobox?
- On that note, if they commonly hang upside down, wouldn't it be nice to show it?[2]
- I'm not sure how Vietnamese (or where it's from) names work, but should the full name of Dao Van Tien be used in the taxobox, instead of a last name?
- Does the caption of the image under Anatomy and physiology need to repeat the article at length? If you shortened it, you could also get rid of the white space under it.
- I know that one of the helping authors is a fan of explicative captions (on the presumption that most readers will only read the lead and look at the pictures), but I trimmed it a little bit. Sasata (talk) 21:01, 3 March 2013 (UTC)
- "with no significant difference between the sexes" If there are any, they should be mentioned. If not, should be reworded. As is, it reads like you're leaving out info.
- Hmmm ... it doesn't read like that to me. Can you suggest a wording you'd be satisfied with? (would prefer not to leave it out, as many animals show sexual dimorphism, and if there's no explicit mention, perhaps some readers might think it had been forgotten?) Sasata (talk) 21:01, 3 March 2013 (UTC)
- There is info about female attraction to scent marks under behaviour, but shouldn't this be under reproduction?
- "Being a generalist food eater" sounds a bit awkward. It's like "water drinker" or something, common sense. Rephrase?
- Seasonal weight changes are mentioned under anatomy, but it could be specified how they obtain higher weights under the diet section.
- Again perhaps, but I think it works ok where it is. Will see if any of my co-authors have an opinion about this. Sasata (talk) 21:01, 3 March 2013 (UTC)
- My issue was not so much the placement, more that it needs elaboration. As is, it is just mentioned they are fatter in some seasons, not how. Do they eat intensively for a short time prior to winter, or is it a gradual build up in weight?
- "The population in China has been estimated at less than 500 individuals" and "In China, Daweishan, Fenshuiling, and Huanglianshan Reserve maintained approximately 80% of the population of the species in 2007" seem to contradict each other.
- I don't see the contradiction; less than 500 individuals in China, of which 80% are in Daweishan, Fenshuiling, and Huanglianshan Reserves ... Sasata (talk) 21:01, 3 March 2013 (UTC)
- There are some images[3][4] of a specimen with some kind of tracking device, could be nice to show under conservation.
- It is pretty much a GA now, so I'll pass it next time you respond. Few remaining issues can be changed afterwards, or are optional. FunkMonk (talk) 21:25, 3 March 2013 (UTC)
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