Talk:Richard Edward O'Connor/GA1

GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: Wizardman (talk · contribs) 16:55, 22 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I'll review this article shortly. Wizardman 16:55, 22 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Here are the issues I found:

"admitted to the Bar on 15 June 1876" I don't think bar is supposed to be capitalized since it's not noting a specific one, but maybe i'm wrong on that one.
"In these portfolios he" language is a bit odd here, perhaps "In these positions.."?
"and supported the cause of Federation." of the Federation; that issues pops up a couple times.
How much did he make as a Senator? Normally this wouldn't be needed but given the notes of his financial issues, this would be interesting to know.

I'll put this on hold and will pass when the issues are fixed. Wizardman 22:40, 22 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

It looks like portfolios is a way of saying positions, so that one's fine. I fixed the others, and while I'd like to see a salary, that's not a GA issue. As a result, I'll pass the article. I don't normally fix the issues myself, but there are few enough that it should be okay in this case. Wizardman 03:46, 28 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Sorry; I didn't see this until now. Thanks for your review! I've reversed the Federation changes, though, since it is always referred to as simply "Federation", not "the Federation". Rather like "independence" or "autonomy" in the way it's used in Australian history. Frickeg (talk) 19:46, 28 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]