Talk:Rise of the Tomb Raider/GA1

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Reviewer: Freikorp (talk · contribs) 12:46, 26 June 2018 (UTC)[reply]


  • Why no mention of the macOS release in the lead (or the body for that matter)?
  • "using rope arrows" - I've played the game so I know what you're talking about. A general reader might need an explanation of what a rope arrow is.
  • "a large arsenal of weapons" - I'd simply this to just a 'variety' of weapons
  • "receiving a skill point to spend at the base camp" - the base camp hasn't been introduced yet; it gets explained in the next paragraph. I'd either just drop this or explain/wikilink it here instead.
  • "Elite allows them to bring already-acquired skills and weapons to the level" - from memory, doesn't this allow you to bring skills you required after the level was completed back to this level? Should this be clarified to the reader? Simply saying 'bring already-acquired' skills isn't very clear.
  • You should explicitly state the collectible cards are digital. The article Trading card even has a sub-section on digital cards you can wikilink to instead of the current link
  • "an ancient order of knights which is a paramilitary organization" - this is awkward wording, how about " an ancient order of knights turned paramilitary organization"?
  • "Trinity ambushes them, stabs Jonah and takes the Atlas" - I'd clarify that it is Konstantin that stabs Jonah
  • "heals him and revealing that he" - grammar
  • "players can see Lara's character progression" - I feel like this should be changed to past tense
  • Pretty sure 'The Edge' was supposed to link to The Edge (1997 film) (or possible The Edge (2010 film)) instead of the U2 musician :)
  • Is 'Grindy' supposed to be piped to Grind?
  • "including Russian realists" - can you give examples?
  • The source does not mention any example though.
  • "in which viewers could choose the weather" - I'm confused; I think this needs clarification.
  • "Towell found the game so graphically appealing that he took screenshots of it." - I'm not convinced this is worth mentioning, I mean, who cares if he took screenshots, but up to you
  • "which she called "interesting"" - I don't think this needs quotes, I'd just say 'which she found interesting'

Very impressive work. Looking forward to passing this once issues are addressed. Freikorp (talk) 13:11, 26 June 2018 (UTC)[reply]

@Freikorp: - Thanks for the review! I think I have addressed most of the issues. However, I am not sure how to clarify rope arrows though. Arrows tied with a rope? AdrianGamer (talk) 15:11, 26 June 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Yeah I guess there's no easy way to clarify the rope arrow thing. If this was an FA nomination I might suggest choosing a picture of her with one, but I'm happy to pass this now as is. Congrats. :) Freikorp (talk) 23:41, 26 June 2018 (UTC)[reply]
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