Talk:Russian battleship Gangut (1911)/GA1

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Reviewer: JonCatalán^(Talk) 21:56, 7 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]

The following are changes I made, apart from any light ce I might have done, to the text.

"Gangut ([Гангут] Error: {{Lang-xx}}: text has italic markup (help)) was the lead ship of the Gangut-class battleships of the Imperial Russian Navy built before World War I, although she was the last to be completed." → I thought it flowed better as follows, "Gangut ([Гангут] Error: {{Lang-xx}}: text has italic markup (help)) was both the lead ship of the Gangut-class battleships of the Imperial Russian Navy built before World War I and the last of her class to be completed."

Here are some comments on the text.

"The Russians did not believe that superfiring turrets offered any advantage, discounting the value of axial fire..." → The language is a bit technical. Maybe you can make a quick note explaining what axial fire is — in a set of em dashes.
"She completed with only a single 3-inch (76 mm) 30-caliber Lender anti-aircraft (AA) gun mounted on the quarterdeck." → "She completed with..." sounds a bit awkward, I think.
"Conway's says that four 75-millimeter (3.0 in) were added to the roofs of the end turrets during the war." → Four 75-millimeter what?

Other

Prose is clear and concise.
Article is stable.
File:Gangutlayboard1909.jpg → The tag is fine, but you might want to replace the older tag with the new pd-old template.

Looks good. The above are just suggestions. JonCatalán^(Talk) 22:39, 7 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]