Talk:Sara Ramirez/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Numerounovedant (talk · contribs) 19:01, 3 May 2017 (UTC)

You've come a long way from WP Edit-a-thon. So, now that we are finally here, I'll be more than happy to review this. Will put up comments soon. NumerounovedantTalk 19:03, 3 May 2017 (UTC)

For starters make sure that the references are in order. All the necessary fields should be filled, dates in DD/MM/YYYY order, full name of the publishers should be included. The "work" field should be used​ for journals/newspapers/other such publications, and "publisher" for the rest. Wiki-link to the page of the publishers should be made on the first occurrence in the section. NumerounovedantTalk 19:08, 3 May 2017 (UTC)

• Hahaha yes, thanks for the review. I have fixed the references to the best of my understanding. Callietorres (talk) 10:58, 4 May 2017 (UTC)

Lead

• I believe that actress​should be place before singer, songwriter.
• The voice roles can be combined into one sentence to avoid repetiton.

Early life

• Her father "is" and her mother "is" - present tense.
• "They moved—and eventually settled in Tierrasanta, San Diego" - I believe They eventually settled should suffice.

Career

• "Based on the life of the Puerto Rican gangster Salvador Agron, the production was critically unsuccessful" - I believe that garnered negative reviews would be a better choice.
• "the film Ramirez play Rose" - had?
• "both on Sony's PlayStation console." - I am not sure ofthe use "both" here.
• "She later reprised her role in the the latter's sequel" - repetiton of "the"
• Maybe a small description of her role in 'The Gershwins' Fascinating Rhythm'?
• "She then appeared in the 2001 Broadway production" - You could use Ramirez here and use "she" in the line.
• "The same year, she starred other productions" - missing "in"
• Is there a source for the critical acclaim of Spamalot?
• "she revealed that top executives from ABC loved her performance in Spamalot so much that they offered her a role in any ABC show she wanted." - "she revealed that top executives from ABC, who were greatly impressed by her performance in Spamalot, offered her a role in any ABC show she wanted." I think could work this way.
• A little bit of repetition here and in the Singing career section can needs to be checked.
• Although I know narrowing down to one review for a such roles can be difficult, but maybe a tiny one can elevate the part.

Amazing work so far, I'll go through the rest soon. NumerounovedantTalk 11:51, 4 May 2017 (UTC)

• @Numerounovedant: Fixed all hopefully. Callietorres (talk) 16:29, 4 May 2017 (UTC)

Personal life and off-screen work

• NADA

Filmography and awards

• NADA

Discography

• NADA

Images

• This is minor, but make sure that they have appropriate alt texts.

The rest looks good to me, really great work on the article. I've made minor changes myself, and with your addittions/improvements this looks worthy of GA. Looking forward to working with you in the future. For now, I am happy to give this a Pass. NumerounovedantTalk 16:42, 4 May 2017 (UTC)

Sorry, you'll have to fix the dead links. NumerounovedantTalk 16:44, 4 May 2017 (UTC)

• Fixed.

• @Numerounovedant: Thank you for the review and for acknowledging all the work. It was good learning experience, and I look forward to working with you as well. Callietorres (talk) 17:47, 4 May 2017 (UTC)

Now, its a Pass. NumerounovedantTalk 17:49, 4 May 2017 (UTC)