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Reviewer: HAL333 (talk · contribs) 03:38, 12 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]

I look forward to reviewing this and working with you The C of E. ~ HAL333 03:38, 12 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Lede
  • You could wikilink bandstand
  • Insert "it" after "ruled"
Original Seal
  • Scottish Christian evangelist John Alexander Dowie, of the Christian Catholic Church in Zion, founded the city in 1902. Dowie's relation to this church is vague. From what I understand, he founded that church - could you clarify it? Also, was there a link between the founding of the church and the founding of the city as well?
  • To make it a little less choppy, you could combine the sentences The seal used a quartered shield with Christian symbols on it. The shield contained a cross, a dove holding an olive branch, a crown with a scepter with the city name in the shield with the phrase "God reigns" in a banner above it. into something like The seal used a quartered shield which displayed Christian symbols: a cross, a dove holding an olive branch, and a crown with a scepter with the city name in the shield with the phrase "God reigns" in a banner above it.
  • That last sentence/clause also uses "with" too often.
Lawsuit

You could change Sherman felt offended by this to The Christian symbolism offended Sherman, who demanded... It's a little more concise and less vague. The court also found that the "God reigns" banner was also a religious statement that had no secular context. Remove that second also.

New seal

By 1994, the police incorporated the new city seal into their decals. Add "had" before incorporated.

    • @HAL333: I have made the amendements you have suggested. As for the court finding line, I think that should be retained because it shows that the court considered each of the elements of the seal rather than just looking at it as a whole. The C of E God Save the Queen! (talk) 06:16, 20 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Pass Everything looks good now. ~ HAL333 18:04, 20 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]

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