Talk:Shannon Moore/GA1

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Reviewer: Miyagawa (talk) 22:17, 10 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I'll be reviewing this article, I'll give it a read through now and added any points or questions below. A little titbit is that back in the days when I followed wrestling like crazy (it's now limited to the occasional Saturday morning repeat when the wife is sleeping in!), I went to one of the UK only WWE PPVs where Shannon Moore was fighting in the dark match. Can't remember who his opponent was, but I remember that he didn't leave back up the ramp and went through a side exit right below where we were sitting. Anyway... I'll get to that review now... Miyagawa (talk) 22:17, 10 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

  • World Wrestling Federation / Entertainment (2001–2005): "In March 2001, the World Wrestling Federation purchased WCW, and Moore's contract was included in the purchase." - Perhaps "...purchased WCW, which included Moore's contract." Just a way to get out of repeating purchased/purchase.
  • "which saw Moore wrestle under a mask as "El Gran Luchadore".[32] Moore faced John "Bradshaw" Layfield" - would flow better if the two sentences were merged with a comma rather than breaking them up using a full stop.
  • "he got a concussion and suffered whiplash after..." I think that perhaps "he suffered a concussion and whiplash after..." it's just that the "got" seems out of place.
  • Return to World Wrestling Entertainment (2006–2008): "sidtracting Noble and allowing" - sidetracking?
    • It was supposed to be 'distracted'. I put the 'd' and 's' in the wrong places. NiciVampireHeart 14:30, 15 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • Wikilink "Deuce 'n' Domino" in the fourth paragraph? If it's already linked in this section then don't worry about it, but I couldn't see it.
  • Personal life: Do we know Crystal's surname?

I think that's everything. :) Miyagawa (talk) 23:20, 10 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I apologise for the delay - real-life got rather hectic this week. Thanks for the review! NiciVampireHeart 14:30, 15 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the response, happy to pass this as a GA now - on Wikipedia's 10th birthday! Miyagawa (talk) 14:43, 15 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks so much! NiciVampireHeart 14:47, 15 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]