Talk:Shoot 'Em Up (film)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Ssven2 (talk · contribs) 08:26, 17 January 2018 (UTC)

I will review this article. Thank you.  — Ssven2 ^{Looking at you, kid} 08:26, 17 January 2018 (UTC)

Comments

• Wikilink "drifter" to the correct link for those who may not be aware of its meaning.Y
• "enlisting the help of prostitute DQ" — "enlisting the help of a prostitute Donna Quintano". Y
• "At a bus stop in a rough part of town," — Name of town? and also the "rough part"? (At least clarify why the name is not given in the film if it isn't mentioned in it)

• Neither is revealed, unfortunately. However, it's unlikely not in an American town considering this movie had been shot in Canada as you may have read already.

• What do you mean by "lactating prostitute"? Just prostitute would suffice anyhow.

• Apart from having sex with her customers, she also breastfeed them. The villain, though, has referred to her as a wet nurse at one point, but I have deleted "lactating" per your concern.

• Ooh, kinky. Mama. ;-)

• "Smith takes Rutledge hostage; Hertz and Hammerson to appear." — Doesn't quite make sense here. Do clarify and tweak the sentence. Y give it a copyedit if you believe the text could be tightened
• "live rounds" is informal. Any other formal word like "bullets"/"bombs"? Y
• "took place in Toronto and took fifty-five days" — write this as "took place in Toronto and lasted for fifty-five days" to avoid repetition of "took".Y
• Try expanding the reception section and describe the critics' opinion of the performances of the cast and the technical aspects.  Doing...
• Wikilink Variety in reference number 25. Y

Good work on the article, Slightlymad. Address these comments and the article is promoted.  — Ssven2 ^{Looking at you, kid} 09:26, 17 January 2018 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

1. Is it reasonably well written?

   A. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:

   B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:

2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?

   A. Has an appropriate reference section:

   B. Citation to reliable sources where necessary:

   C. No original research:

3. Is it broad in its coverage?

   A. Major aspects:

   B. Focused:

4. Is it neutral?

   Fair representation without bias:

5. Is it stable?

   No edit wars, etc:

6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?

   A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:

   B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:

7. Overall: Passed, my queries were met and solved by the nominator.

   Pass or Fail:

Great job, Slightlymad. Keep up the good work.  — Ssven2 ^{Looking at you, kid} 11:54, 17 January 2018 (UTC)