Talk:Siege of Wardour Castle/GA1
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Reviewer: Amitchell125 (talk · contribs) 15:49, 31 March 2020 (UTC)
Happy to do the review for this article.
Assessment[edit]
Lead section[edit]
- fighting for the King - link king to Charles I of England;
- Linked, and expanded to King Charles
- Link mines;
- the New Wardour Castle - consider removing the.
Background[edit]
- Link Wiltshire; the 5th Baron Lovel - as the link leads to all the barons, link to this instead, i.e. the 5th Baron Lovel.
- Who was John Aubrey?
- Royal favour - the capital is not necessary here
- "for his catholic zeal" and "stiff papist" - these look like quotations, and if so in each case the person who said it needs to be named, or the quote not used.
- Should not parliament be capitalised?
- multiple occasions,… - the number needs to be more specific, as 'multiple' is too vague.
- The castle was subsequently confiscated… - by whom? Please clarify.
- Wardour Castle is located… - this sentence lacks a citation. Also, the following sentence does not appear to have the right citation, as Stanton does not refer to the 5th Baron Lovel. (However, Wright does refer to Lovell, perhaps this is the correct source.)
- Please amend the text so that Matthew reads 'Sir Matthew', and the windows were not enlarged, but constructed (according to Wright).
First siege[edit]
- ...out of Somerset… - link Somerset
- Lady Arundell's grandchildren were held until July 1644, when they were released… - Wright gives a different date.
Second siege[edit]
- ...the historian H. F. Chettle suggests… - replaced suggests with 'suggested'.
- ...which would place the second siege as starting in late May. - this is not stated by Ludlow and should be left to the reader to surmise (see WP:EDITORIALIZING).
- Although there was no formal blockade of the castle, the country around it was controlled by the Royalists. - could a specific page in Ludlow be provided for this sentence?
- Ludlow recalls … - consider replacing with 'Ludlow recalled in his memoir…'
- ..after three months they were prepared to blow the walls. - from how I read French the miners 'were eventually successful', i.e. it took them three months of attempts before they succeded. The text should I think be amended accordingly.
- ...and a few days later the first mine was exploded. - I can't find this in Ludlow on p. 34.
Bibliography[edit]
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- Consider linking Edgar to this (available with a free registration).
Looking good[edit]
Harrias, it's looking largely sorted, thanks for the work you've done so far. Amitchell125 (talk) 18:18, 6 April 2020 (UTC)
- @Harrias: - Hello, as the article has been on hold for over a week, can you complete the last remaining issues? Please let me know if there is a problem and you need more time, as it would seem a shame to fail the article now that you've done much of the work required. Amitchell125 (talk) 20:00, 10 April 2020 (UTC)
Sorry, this completely slipped my mind. I'm unlikely to have much time until Monday now, but I'll see what I can do in the mean time. Harrias talk 19:20, 10 April 2020 (UTC)
- @Amitchell125: Okay, had some unexpected quiet time this morning, so I've tried to work through the remaining points, let me know what you think now. Harrias talk 09:02, 11 April 2020 (UTC)
Passing[edit]
Great article - thanks for all your work, passing now. Amitchell125 (talk) 21:46, 11 April 2020 (UTC)