Talk:Slow Dancing (Aly & AJ song)

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Former good article nomineeSlow Dancing (Aly & AJ song) was a Music good articles nominee, but did not meet the good article criteria at the time. There may be suggestions below for improving the article. Once these issues have been addressed, the article can be renominated. Editors may also seek a reassessment of the decision if they believe there was a mistake.
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DateProcessResult
August 6, 2022Good article nomineeNot listed

GA Review[edit]

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This review is transcluded from Talk:Slow Dancing (Aly & AJ song)/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 05:56, 21 July 2022 (UTC)[reply]


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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()
3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()
Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

I will conduct this review today! --K. Peake 05:56, 21 July 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead[edit]

  • The writing/production sentence should be the second of the para instead; follow this by the first four sentences of the second para moved here since they should come before the actual release date
  • "Ryan Spraker and Yves Rothman," → "Ryan Spraker, and Yves Rothman,"
  • "also producing the track." → "also handling the production."
  • In the new order, the comp and lyrics parts should start the second para
  • ""Slow Dancing" was originally envisioned" → "It was originally envisioned"
  • "re-wrote it into a" → "re-wrote it as a"
  • "updating its lyrics to" → "updating the lyrics to"
  • ""Slow Dancing" was originally" → "the song was originally"
  • "they found its soft," → "they found the soft,"
  • ""Slow Dancing" was positively received by critics" → "The song received positive reviews from critics"
  • "isolation and longing as" → "isolation, and longing as"
  • "A music video directed by Aly's husband Stephen Ringer" → "A music video for the song directed by Stephen Ringer"
  • "A Touch of the Beat Tour beginning in" → "A Touch of the Beat Tour, beginning in"

Writing and recording[edit]

  • "Ryan Spraker and Yves Rothman,[1][2] while Rothman produced" → "Ryan Spraker, and Yves Rothman,[1][2] while Rothman also produced"
  • [9] should only be invoked once in the sentence
  • "but they did not complete its lyrics" → "but did not complete the lyrics"
  • "its subject matter and" → "the subject matter and"
  • Done.
  • "AJ admits that" → "AJ admitted that"
  • "during which they" → "during which the duo"
  • "Rothman agreed that they" → "Rothman agreed that Aly & AJ"
  • "where it was impossible for listeners to envision anything" → "where listeners would not envision anything"
  • [8] should solely be invoked at the end of the sentence
  • "completed for the album." → "completed for A Touch of the Beat Gets You Up on Your Feet Gets You Out and Then Into the Sun."
  • "include Sylvain Carton on saxophone;" → "included Sylvain Carton on saxophone;" with the wikilink
  • "cello and organ;" → "cello, and organ;"
  • "of summer evenings spent" → "of summer nights spent"

Release[edit]

  • This should be the section after music and lyrics
  • Remove wikilink on studio album
  • Remove commas around Jared Rosenberg
  • "AJ argues that TikTok exposure" → "AJ argued that the TikTok exposure"
  • "instead claiming they" → "instead asserting the duo"
  • "and hoped the song" → "and he hoped the song"
  • "AJ insists they were not" → "AJ insisted they were not"
  • Remove or replace Gaudie per WP:RSSM
  • "The duo credits fans' response" → "The duo credited fans' response"
  • "James McAlister and The She-J" → "James McAlister, and the She-J" per MOS:THEMUSIC

Music and lyrics[edit]

  • Remove wikilinks on "Attack of Panic" and "Joan of Arc on the Dance Floor"
  • "observed that the band's" → "observed that Aly & AJ's"
  • Remove or replace The Crimson White per WP:RSSM
  • "with a simple guitar riff" → "with a guitar riff"
  • Remove or replace CommRadio per WP:RSSM
  • "cello and saxophone." → "cello, and saxophone."
  • Introduce Thomas Bleach here
  • Remove or replace Pipe Dream per WP:RSSM
  • "while other critics have likened" → "Certain critics have likened"
  • Fixed.
  • Remove or replace The Independent Florida Alligator per WP:RSSM
  • "the chorus admitting" → "the chorus admitting," with the pipe
  • "The song's pre-chorus reads" → "The song's pre-chorus is repeated"
  • Remove pipe on COVID-19 social distancing
  • "with Forty5 Presents dubbing it" → "with the staff of Forty5 Presents dubbing it"
  • "The Alternative Press's Augusta Battoclette" → "Alternative Press's Augusta Battoclette" with the pipe

Reception[edit]

  • Any thematic order for the reviews here, i.e what they focused on?
  • "said it possesses a" → "said the song possesses a"
  • Remove or replace Pipe Dream per WP:RSSM
  • Removed.
  • "both AJ and Aly's vocal performances, Maggiore said" → "Aly & AJ's vocal performance, Maggiore said,"
  • "music critic Thomas Bleach felt the song perfectly demonstrates the band's" → "Bleach felt the song perfectly demonstrates the duo's"
  • Remove or replace The Hoya per WP:RSSM
  • "while Sweety High's Taylor Augustin" → "whereas Sweety High's Taylor Augustin"
  • Remove or replace Benedetto per WP:RSSM
  • "said the artists" → "said Aly & AJ"
  • "of its lyrical weight" → "of the lyrical weight"
  • Remove pipe on Alternative Press
  • "Writing for the Alternative Press, Augusta Battoclette likened" → "Writing for Alternative Press, Battoclette likened"
  • Remove or replace The Daily Californian per WP:RSSM
  • "one of the album's three best tracks." → "one of the three best tracks on A Touch of the Beat Gets You Up on Your Feet Gets You Out and Then Into the Sun."
  • "Ineye Komonibo of Refinery29 included" → "Komonibo of Refinery29 included"

Music video[edit]

  • "Directed, edited and produced" → "Directed, edited, and produced"
  • "The sisters credit" → "The sisters credited"
  • "which in turn distinguishes" → "which in turn distinguished"
  • Are you sure "as time passes" is useful at the end?

Live performances[edit]

  • Remove wikilink on TikTok
  • "New Years Eve celebration." → "New Year's Eve celebration." with the wikilink
  • "the duo performed "Slow Dancing" on" → "they performed "Slow Dancing" on"
  • Fixed.
  • Remove or replace The Lantern per WP:RSSM

Credits and personnel[edit]

  • Use {{spaced ndash}} so there is the right space between credits and personnel

References[edit]

  • Copyvio score looks too high at 46.2%; cut down overquoting to fix this
  • Make sure all of these are archived by using fix dead links
  • Cite Broadcast Music, Inc. as publisher instead on ref 2
  • Remove or replace ref 3 per WP:SELFPUB
  • Cite Jaxsta as publisher instead on ref 4
  • See WP:RSP for why I am in the middle about refs 5 and 57, also fix MOS:QWQ issues with these either way
  • Cite Apple Music as publisher instead on refs 6, 31 and 43, also only wikilink on the first instance
  • Fix MOS:QWQ issues with ref 8, also what makes it and ref 70 a reliable source?
  • Cite iHeartRadio as publisher instead on ref 13
  • Cite MTV Australia as publisher instead on ref 14 and pipe to MTV (Australian and New Zealand TV channel)
  • Fix MOS:QWQ issues with refs 15, 29 and 59
  • Cite Amazon as publisher instead on ref 17
  • WP:OVERLINK of Paper on ref 19
  • WP:OVERLINK of Google Translate on ref 20 and pipe GQ Russia to GQ
  • What makes ref 21 a reliable source?
  • Remove or replace ref 24 per WP:RSSM
  • Remove or replace ref 25 per it being a gossip site
  • Remove or replace ref 27 per WP:RSSM
  • Remove or replace ref 32 per above
  • Fix MOS:CAPS issues with ref 33 and what makes it reliable exactly?
  • Remove or replace ref 34 per WP:RSSM
  • Cite Refinery29 as publisher instead on ref 35
  • WP:OVERLINK of Google Translate on refs 36 and 41, also the last name should be cited followed by first plus middle
  • Remove or replace ref 37 WP:RSDISCOGS
  • WP:OVERLINK of Billboard on ref 38
  • Remove or replace ref 39 since that was founded by a YouTube user and has no staff
  • Remove or replace ref 40 per WP:SELFPUB
  • Remove or replace ref 42 per WP:RSSM
  • Remove or replace ref 44 per WP:RSP
  • What exactly makes ref 46 a reliable source?
  • Remove or replace ref 47 per WP:RSSM
  • Remove or replace ref 53 per above
  • Pipe StyleCaster to SHE Media on ref 55
  • Fix MOS:QWQ issues with ref 56 and cite Idolator as publisher instead
  • Cite Audacy as publisher instead on ref 61
  • I'm not sure about ref 62 since it seems like a gossip website; what constitutes reliability?
  • Cite Young Hollywood as publisher instead on ref 63
  • Remove or replace ref 64 per WP:RSSM
  • Cite WKNC-FM as publisher instead on ref 65 and fix MOS:QWQ issues
  • Remove or replace ref 66 since that has an editorial team of merely two
  • Remove or replace ref 68 per WP:SELFPUB since that looks similar to Medium
  • Cite WERS as publisher instead on ref 69
  • Remove or replace ref 71 per WP:RSSM
  • I don't see much an editorial team for ref 72, so what exactly makes it reliable?
  • Remove or replace ref 73 per WP:RSSM
  • Remove or replace ref 76 per above
  • Cite ABC News as publisher instead on ref 77
  • Remove or replace ref 79 per WP:RSSM
  • WP:OVERLINK of Us Weekly on ref 80

Final comments and verdict[edit]

  •  On hold for two weeks until all of the issues are fixed; the sources may take a bit of time to replace or remove. --K. Peake 08:17, 22 July 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • Hi K. Peake; please be advised that I have decided to withdraw my GA nomination of this article, due to the amount of sources you've deemed unreliable. Unfortunately I am struggling to find the time to replace/correct them within a reasonable timeframe; perhaps I will revisit at a future date. Apologies for wasting your time.--Changedforbetter (talk) 15:28, 5 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • ✗ Fail after your decision, however that is sad since I put a lot of effort into reviewing this. --K. Peake 07:49, 6 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]
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