Talk:Stalk-eyed fly/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sasata (talk · contribs) 01:13, 28 November 2012 (UTC)

I'll review this article. Should have comments up within a couple of days. Sasata (talk) 01:13, 28 November 2012 (UTC)

I've added some comments based on a quick read-through. There's more to discuss, but these will get us started. Sasata (talk) 16:30, 28 November 2012 (UTC)

• some copyediting is needed, e.g.

"ability of the males, , shortly after"

done

"contains members with a specific and unique, their"

done

• there shouldn't be a space between punctuation and the citation, not any spaces between consecutive citations

done

• the two left-aligned images are pushing subheaders in, and would be better placed on the right

done

• the lead should serve as a summary, and not contain information not present in the article (see WP:LEAD) About half of what's there currently should be moved to a separate section "Habitat and distribution". The final sentence should be moved to the Taxonomy section.

Working on this.GenesBrainsBehaviorNeuroscienceKL (talk) 06:55, 9 December 2012 (UTC)

done

• is there enough literature to warrant a section about fossil taxa and evolution?

there is not — Preceding unsigned comment added by Cobiorower (talk • contribs) 21:47, 15 December 2012 (UTC)

• generally, only the first word of heading and subheadings should be capitalized

done

• the taxonomy section should indicate who named the family, and in what year. Have there been any phylogenetic studies that indicate the relationships of the family to others in the Diptera/Cyclorrapha? Some of the information currently in this section should go elsewhere, like distribution.

done

• "except the African genus Centrioncus Speiser." Genera are a single name; is the second word an authority? If so, it shouldn't be italicized.

done

• jargon should either be defined, especially if they are redlinked with no easy way for the reader to find out what they mean. Examples: laterotergite, postnotum

done

• there's too much detail given about specific experiments, and who performed them. These should be summarized to reflect the fact that this article is an overview of the entire family.

done

• to meet the GA criterion of broadness, the article should list all of the genera in the family, and give a short summary of each (characteristic features, # of species within, distribution, and perhaps basic taxonomy like who circumscribed it and in what year).

done

• I've added several citation needed tags throughout.

done

• a TV show is not an appropriate source for an encyclopedia article, please replace

done

• some of the book sources are missing page numbers, these should be included to help me (and other readers) verify the information

done

• in the lead, link morphology, sexual selection, handicap principle

done

• include the family authority and type genus in the taxobox
• "first described by Dr. John Fothergill" Wikipedia typically doesn't include titles; link Fothergill

done

• the article says the family is in suborder Cyclorrapha, while the taxobox says Brachycera

done

• a complete species list is not appropriate for a family-level article. I'd recommend making stubs for the genera, then the species lists can be moved there. Alternatively, you could create a page List of Stalk-eyed flies and copy/paste the list into there (with an appropriate source). For this article, a summary of each genus would be better: when & who described the genus, how many species does it have, what are the characteristics of that genus (briefly).

done; made a stub page, but could not find information on each genus.

• "There are several hundred species in the family" but earlier, the article says there are "some 150 described species"?

done

• Prosphyrocephala should be listed as well in the taxobox (with a dagger to denote its extinct status) & genus list
• "with variably produced transverse eye stalks" what does variably produced mean?

done

• link compound eye, conspecifics, alleles

done

• there's too much detail in the first paragraph of sexual selection experiments about how the experiments were performed, try to summarize

done

• what is the number in the caption to "Stalk-eyed fly (Diasemopsis)"? (and link and italicize the name)

Main editor appears to be inactive (hasn't edited since December 23), so am closing this review. Sasata (talk) 19:25, 17 January 2013 (UTC)