Talk:Statue of James II, Trafalgar Square/GA1

GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: Calvin999 (talk · contribs) 20:25, 19 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Hi. I'm Calvin999 and I am reviewing this nomination. — Calvin999 18:20, 20 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

I would write "James II of England" the first time in the lead.

I've added "of England" for the second usage; the first usage of James II is for the title of the statue, which does not include the "of England" bit. Prioryman (talk) 21:27, 20 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

and (formerly) holding a baton. → The statue used to hold a baton? You write "depicts" earlier on, so it suggests present tense, but it no longer holds one.

I've reworded this. Prioryman (talk) 21:27, 20 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

as Allan Cunningham put it. → as described by Allan Cunningham.

Amended. Prioryman (talk) 21:27, 20 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

The statue of James II is one of three of Stuart monarchs commissioned by the royal servant Tobias Rustat from Grinling Gibbons's workshop in the 1670s and '80s, the others being of James's brother and predecessor Charles II: an equestrian statue in Windsor Castle and a standing figure at the Royal Hospital in Chelsea. → Who was the third monarch?

The line says "The statue of James II is one of three of Stuart monarchs" - I think you missed the bolded word. There were three statues of two monarchs. Prioryman (talk) 21:27, 20 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Link Palace of Whitehall in the History section.

It's already linked from the lead, I don't think I need to link it twice, do I? Prioryman (talk) 21:27, 20 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

at a reported cost of £300. → It's probably not feasible, or even necessary, but a 2015 price equivalent in todays rate would be great to know.

I've added this. Prioryman (talk) 21:27, 20 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Isn't there a cost parameter that exists for info boxes?

Nope, I don't see it in the infobox artwork template. Prioryman (talk) 21:27, 20 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Shouldn't forte have an acute accent above the e? (é)

Not conventionally - it's not in my electronic dictionary, nor on Wiktionary. Prioryman (talk) 21:27, 20 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

the statue's principal author → author doesn't read write, try 'sculptor' perhaps? But you use that a few words after. Maybe not then. But author doesn't read right.

I chose it to avoid repeating "sculptor". I've changed it to "originator". There's some question about what role Quellinus played, as the actual work of creating the statue seems to have been done by others, possibly working from his designs. Prioryman (talk) 21:27, 20 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

I take it that's a block quote in the middle? It doesn't show up as one because of the image. Try using the coding for the block quote like in the controversy section of "Man Down"'s music video.

I've done this - does it look right to you now? Prioryman (talk) 21:27, 20 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Is the Pebble Court the same as the Privy Garden?

It was actually the site of the original Privy Garden before being paved over and separated from a new Privy Garden. A bit too complicated to explain in this article, I think, but it's covered in Privy Garden of the Palace of Whitehall. Prioryman (talk) 21:27, 20 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Your reference use the American date format. Of course, it should be British format.

Yep, that was a legacy of an older version of the article. Fixed now. Prioryman (talk) 21:27, 20 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

You only mention bronze in the lead and info box, not the main sections.

I've added that to the description. Prioryman (talk) 21:27, 20 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Outcome

On hold for 7 days. — Calvin999 18:36, 20 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for doing these. Passing. — Calvin999 21:30, 20 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Congrats! (And thanks to Calvin999 for taking time to review the article.) ---Another Believer _(Talk) 21:39, 20 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

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