Talk:Sticky bomb/GA1
GA Review[edit]
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Lede[edit]
- I'd change "also known" to "commonly known", firstly because it was and secondly to link up with the page location, which is where it is thanks to "most common name".
- Done!
- "The grenade was one of a number of anti-tank weapons designed for use by the British Army and Home Guard as an ad hoc solution to a lack of sufficient anti-tank guns in the aftermath of the Dunkirk evacuation. Designed by a team from MD1 under Major Millis Jefferis" - any chance you could find an alternative to one of the "designed"? It reads as repetition.
- Done!
- "tank or vehicle" - surely a tank is a vehicle? Recommend "vehicle" or "tank or other vehicle".
- Done
- Perhaps an account of any operational success, such as the destruction of six German tanks in North Africa?
- Unfortunately, I'm not sure there's anything else I can add. Only a few sources even mentioned they were used in combat - which surprised me - and even then only in miniscule detail.
Development[edit]
- "Given these shortcomings, what weapons were left were allocated to the British Army, and the Home Guard" - perhaps change "what weapons were left" to something highlighting that it was whatever outdated anti-tank weapons were used. At the moment it reads as "they had only 167 anti-tank guns, which wasn't enough, so the remaining anti-tank guns were given to them" - confusing.
- Done!
- "The grenades were produced by the Kay Brothers Company, a chemical manufacturing firm in Stockport, and between 1940 and 1943 approximately 2.5 million were produced" repetition of "produced".
- Done
Design[edit]
- "from which the nickname 'sticky bomb' was derived. " perhaps an inline?
- Done!