Talk:Stuck Inside of Mobile with the Memphis Blues Again/GA1

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GA Review[edit]

Passed.

The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 07:44, 2 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a. (prose, spelling, and grammar):
    b. (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a. (reference section):
    b. (citations to reliable sources):
    c. (OR):
    d. (copyvio and plagiarism):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a. (major aspects):
    b. (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):
    b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall:
    Pass/fail:

(Criteria marked are unassessed)

For this review, we are reunited after a while! --K. Peake 07:44, 2 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead[edit]

  • Separate the genres using bullet points per Template:Infobox song
  • Write out the rock genre in the body rather than sourcing in the infobox
  • Can you stylize the audio for a song infobox instead?
  • Second infobox looks good, apart from is there supposed to be no singles chronology?
  • "which was released on his seventh studio album" → "from his seventh studio album,"
  • You need to write out directly in the body that Dylan wrote the song
  • The lead is not properly sorted into paragraphs; I would recommend running the first up until the 1971 release and the second para from the earlier take onwards, as I will further instruct
  • "All twenty takes of "Stuck Inside of Mobile with the Memphis Blues Again"" → "All 20 takes of the song" per MOS:NUM
  • "also appears on 1971's" → "also appeared on Dylan's second compilation album," with the wikilink and add the year in brackets instead
  • "An earlier take was" → "An earlier take of the song was" since this will be a new para
  • "The song has received a" → ""Stuck Inside of Mobile with the Memphis Blue Again" has received a" and add what was praised about it
  • The praise is quite vague actually, but I've had an attempt at this. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 12:47, 5 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]
  • "recorded in May 1976 was included" → "recorded in May 1976 was included on" and introduce the album

Recording[edit]

  • Retitle to Background and recording
  • Pipe acoustic to Acoustic music
  • "In 1965, he hired" → "In 1965, Dylan hired"
  • "that the recording sessions" → "that the sessions"
  • Wikilink harmonica
  • Pipe Kenneth Buttrey to Kenny Buttrey
  • "All twenty takes of" → "All 20 takes of" per MOS:NUM
  • "This, and four additional takes" does this mean that take and the other four were released on the edition? If not, then I would suggest changing this to mentioning the four takes also being released.
  • Yes, take 13 and four otheres were on the six-disc Deluxe edition. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 14:46, 4 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]
  • "when it was in included on" → "when it was included on"

Critical comments[edit]

  • Retitle to Analysis and reception
  • "identified several possible influences" → "identifies several possible influences" and for consistency, you should use the same tense throughout unless it's a non-biographical source
  • Start a new sentence at Ma Rainey with "He further notes the influence of" or something similar
  • "that he employed on some of" → "as he employed on some of"
  • Why is "and" used for the preacher + rainman then railroad men + deceased grandfather?
  • "listeners would realise that" → "listeners would realise,"
  • "we all inhabit"." should have the punctuation inside if this is a full sentence per MOS:QUOTE
  • "Dave Margoshes of the considered the song," → "Dave Margoshes considered the song,"
  • Is Crawdaddy supposed to be piped to Crawdaddy (magazine)?
  • "oh-so-accurate refrain."" → "oh-so-accurate refrain"."
  • Italicise Uncut
  • ""grand statements on" → ""grand statements" on"
  • Addressed all of the comments - I think the tense is now consistent. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 11:23, 5 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Live performances[edit]

  • Pipe Pensacola to Pensacola, Florida
  • "on May 16, 176," → "on May 16, 1976," obviously
  • The three omitted verses part is not mentioned by any of the sources
  • Done - added a source for the omitted verses. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 14:05, 4 April 2023 (UTC) (I later found "excising three verses of 'Memphis Blues Again'" in the Rachlis Rolling Stone article; I think this is what I had originally relied on. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 12:45, 5 April 2023 (UTC)_[reply]

Personnel[edit]

References[edit]

  • Ref 1 needs to be corrected from bare formatting
  • I removed this. I don't think sheetmusicplus is a suitable source for the genre; I found three different claims:
https://www.sheetmusicplus.com/title/stuck-inside-of-mobile-with-the-memphis-blues-again-digital-sheet-music/19427074 has "Folk, Rock"
https://www.sheetmusicplus.com/title/stuck-inside-of-mobile-with-the-memphis-blues-again-digital-sheet-music/20267366 has "Folk, Pop"
https://www.sheetmusicplus.com/title/stuck-inside-of-mobile-with-the-memphis-blues-again-digital-sheet-music/19415742 has "Blues, Folk, Rock"
  • Done.
  • It's one of their special editions rather than the standard magazines. I've wikilinked Uncut.

External links[edit]

  • Good

Final comments and verdict[edit]

  •  On hold until all of the issues are fixed; sorry about the lateness, I was having to review on train Wi-Fi. --K. Peake 21:16, 3 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]
  • Many thank for a typically thorough review, K. Peake. Let me know if anything else is required. Regards, BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 12:48, 5 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]
  • ✓ Pass now, this was an ideal pace while I'm on holiday! --K. Peake 20:12, 5 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
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