Talk:Take Your Daughter to Work Day (The Office)/GA1
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Reviewer: Ruby2010 (talk · contribs) 04:42, 3 October 2012 (UTC)
Will review this one! Ruby 2010/2013 04:42, 3 October 2012 (UTC)
Comments[edit]
- Add links to characters in lead (Toby etc) - otherwise, lead looks good
- In plot section, take characters out of parentheses - (Abby) -> daughter, Abby. This makes it look less odd when you have actors' names in parenthesis
- Can you fix the paragraphs in the plot section so one doesn't look so tiny?
- It's been a while since I saw this episode. Michael gives the children the tour after they've already met many of the staff?
- Link rest of characters in plot section and add actors
- Cultural references section - discuss... discuss (in second paragraph, change?)
- lack of or arching plot - an?
- Put categories in alpha order :)
That's pretty much it! The only image used is free use and the citations look good. Putting on hold for seven days. Ruby 2010/2013 04:39, 5 October 2012 (UTC)