Talk:The 37's/GA1

GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: Zanimum (talk · contribs) 19:35, 22 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Passing "Plot", "Writing", "Landing the USS Voyager", "See also", "External links".

Reception

Sharon Lawrence

"Lawrence grew up watching Mulgrew as Mary Ryan on the soap opera Ryan's Hope; from a family where women more often than not became homemakers, Mary Ryan was an "exotic" character—with her career and life in New York City—who served as inspiration for the young Lawrence." There's two way I can take the second part of this sentence:
- Mary Ryan was an inspiration to young Sharon Lawrence. Sharon was from a family where woman became home makers, and Sharon found Mary Ryan exotic.
- Mary Ryan was an inspiration to young Sharon Lawrence. The character of Mary was from a family where woman became home makers, and Mary Ryan's family found Mary Ryan exotic.
Whatever the actual case, this sentence is too delicately structured, it needs to be clearer.
Did Voyager magazine say how Sharon knew Robert Beltran? Previous show? Went to the same school?

Still have to review References. -- Zanimum (talk) 20:51, 22 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

References check out. The only issues appear to be those listed above. -- Zanimum (talk) 21:10, 22 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Yes, the Mulgrew quote has the italicization in the original.
I made this adjustment to the sentence structure. Let me know if it's clearer this way.
No, the magazine didn't say anything about how Ms. Lawrence knew Robert Beltran.

Thanks for taking the time to review this page. — fourthords | =Λ= | 01:07, 23 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Intriguing, it must have been a play or something, IMDb can't find any matches beyond this episode. I suppose that's it, so it's looks like the article is deserved of a GA! Congrats! -- Zanimum (talk) 15:27, 23 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]