Talk:Thomas Wilcher/GA1

GA Review[edit]

"time MHSAA champion" – expand the acronym at least the first time in the body
- the WP:LEAD says Michigan High School Athletic Association (MHSAA). Why do I need to spell it out again once I explain forthcoming abbreviations.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 05:03, 28 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
"the University of Michigan by" – link the university
- Although it is linked in the lead, I will link it again here per your request.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 05:05, 28 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
"Wilcher is the current football head coach " – "Wilcher is the football head coach as of 2008 " – don't use dated terms like "current"
- Thanks.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 05:07, 28 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
"for football is interesting because Gholston did not " – definitely should not be considered "interesting" as that is definitely POV; reword this sentence
- reworded section.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 05:19, 28 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Gary King (talk) 21:38, 27 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

"as fast as 13.48 and 13.28 (wind-aided)[1]" – needs units and a period
- Thanks.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 05:49, 28 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
"Gholston "It was" → "Gholston, "It was"
- done.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 05:42, 28 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
"class...He " – "class [...] He "
- According to Ellipsis, a slightly different form seems to be prevelant.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 05:47, 28 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Gary King (talk) 05:30, 28 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

"Marko Cooper, who was 1999 All-USA second team." – shouldn't it be "Marko Cooper, who was on the 1999 All-USA second team."

Please resolve this issue. Otherwise, the article meets the Good Article criteria and has therefore been passed. Gary King (talk) 06:55, 28 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]