Talk:Tommy Tour/GA1
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Reviewer: Zmbro (talk · contribs) 19:27, 20 March 2020 (UTC)
I'll check this out sometime this weekend. :-) – zmbro (talk) 19:27, 20 March 2020 (UTC)
- Comment Good to see that Zmbro has taken this on (I bowed out because of involvement in the PR). Chrisnait was having some problems with scope="row", but it seemed to work for me on one table.[1] —Ojorojo (talk) 14:06, 21 March 2020 (UTC)
- Lead
- For starters, this will need to be longer. At 36k bytes, it's certainly big enough to have a lead longer than four short sentences
- History
- "They noticed the audience would all stand up at the same time, and stay standing. This indicated that live performances of Tommy had a positive reaction from audiences." → "They noticed the audience would all stand up at the same time, and stay standing, indicating that live performances of Tommy had a positive reaction from audiences."
- "The show later became a popular bootleg recording." Looks like this isn't sourced. And what bootleg album? Has it ever seen official release? Been into Bowie lately and his bootleg album Santa Monica '72 was officially released as Live Santa Monica '72 in 2008 and am wondering if it's been the same for this one.
- "The Who ended 1969 with tour of Europe" → "The Who ended 1969 with a tour of Europe"
- "While 14 February University of Leeds Refectory and 15 February Hull City Hall performances were both recorded," → "While performances on 14 February at the University of Leeds Refectory and 15 February at Hull City Hall were both recorded"
- Link Live at Leeds, as it's not been linked in the body as of this point
- Films and albums
- Looks good
- Tour band
- Looks like the "tour band" was just the band itself, so maybe retitle to just "personnel"?
- Repertoire
- I'd move this above the films and albums section for flow
- "...although it was dropped after two weeks and would not be performed again until 2000." source please?
- "During the final leg, the set list was the same as on the previous tour," → During the final leg, the set list was the same as on the previous leg" as tour implies an entirely different tour
- You can remove the multiple links to the same songs in this sections, such as "Naked Eye" and "My Generation", so that they're only linked once
- Tour dates
- Looks good, great job sourcing everything
- References
- Not sure how but The Story of The Who (liner notes) is showing an error message for me. Maybe it's named wrong?
- Final thoughts
- Rest looks good. Very well-written and good job sourcing. Should be a GA in no time :-) – zmbro (talk) 16:59, 22 March 2020 (UTC)
- Comment Zmbro, what about adding a picture? Chrisnait (talk | contribs) 12:40, 23 March 2020 (UTC)
- Chrisnait That's a good idea. Is there an image of the Who performing during this tour or during the late 60s? – zmbro (talk) 15:30, 23 March 2020 (UTC)
- If not, that Copenhagen pic is good as well. – zmbro (talk) 15:31, 23 March 2020 (UTC)
- Zmbro, I couldn't find any pictures of the band during 1969–1970 on Wikimedia Commons. I was thinking of using this picture for the Infobox. What do you think of that? Chrisnait (talk | contribs) 15:39, 23 March 2020 (UTC)
- If not, that Copenhagen pic is good as well. – zmbro (talk) 15:31, 23 March 2020 (UTC)
- Chrisnait That's a good idea. Is there an image of the Who performing during this tour or during the late 60s? – zmbro (talk) 15:30, 23 March 2020 (UTC)
✓ Pass All good for me. – zmbro (talk) 19:52, 23 March 2020 (UTC)