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lemma[edit]
Gmbh should not be part of the lemma Norschweden (talk) 01:50, 23 February 2017 (UTC)
Requested move 29 March 2018[edit]
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The result of the move request was: page moved. TonyBallioni (talk) 00:12, 6 April 2018 (UTC)
Volkswagen Truck & Bus GmbH → Volkswagen Truck & Bus – GmbH shouldn't be part of the lemma Norschweden (talk) 22:33, 29 March 2018 (UTC)
- Inclined to agree per Wikipedia:Naming conventions (companies). A search for intitle:GmbH shows many other pages that include the suffix in the article title and might be candidates for renaming. Dekimasuよ! 19:35, 4 April 2018 (UTC)
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Proposing article update[edit]
 | Part of an edit requested by an editor with a conflict of interest has been implemented. I didn't include RIO together with the other brands. The rest of the suggestions were implemented |
Dear all,
I would like to suggest to update the article as the figures are largely outdated (2015), some information wrong and some missing as described in detail below. Please note that I have a financial conflict of interest as I am being paid by TRATON SE. Therefore, I will not make any edits myself but hope that uninvolved editors could review my suggestions and make changes if they find them appropriate.
You can find my suggestion in my user space User:Conandcon/TRATON_SE. Here is also a diff so that you can see my suggested changes vs. the current article.
Detailled description of proposed updates
Introduction:
- First sentence: I would like to suggest to add TRATON's RIO brand to complete the list of brands. The brand was introduced in 2016 and is already now shortly described in the article under "Brands". (source Automotive World). I do not suggest to delete content here.
- Second sentence: I would like to suggest to update sales and change from 2015 to 2018 numbers. (180,000 --> 233,000 sold vehicles) (source AFP at France24)
- Fourth sentence (starting "As of December"): Update employee numbers from 2015 to 2018 and name. (76,000 --> 81,000 employees) (source Traton website facts & figures)
History:
- 6th paragraph: I would like to suggest to delete the latter part of the sentence as commercial vehicles brand organizationally and operationally reorganized as of 1 January 2019. Delete: "...AG in legal terms, but was designated a partner of the new commercial vehicle group from an organizational and operational point of view. "
- Explanation of issue: See Volkswagen annual report 2018 page 161: “As part of the changes in the management structure of the Volkswagen Group, the Volkswagen Commercial Vehicles brand will be allocated to the Passenger Cars segment from January 1, 2019 and the segment will be renamed Passenger Cars and Light Commercial Vehicles. Consequently, the Passenger Cars Business Area will then include the Volks-wagen Commercial Vehicles brand in the financial reporting. The Commercial Vehicles segment will continue to comprise the Commercial Vehicles Business Area, but from January 1, 2019, will exclude the Volkswagen Commercial Vehicles brand. The Automotive Division will remain unchanged.”)
- At the end of the history section: Suggestion to add (no deletion) transformation into SE (including source) following logic of description of earlier transformation into AG and name change. (source German daily)
- Below a possible addition of transformation into SE: Suggestion to add (no deletion) information regarding stock listing in Frankfurt and Stockholm as a major milestone in the company's history. (source Bloomberg)
Corporate Structure:
- Last sentence: Here I would like to suggest to delete the last sentence (starting "The Volkswagen Commercial Vehicles brand"...). This information is wrong as commercial vehicles brand is not considered associate partner after reorganization as of 1 January 2019. (Please see same source as first bullet point/first suggestion for history section)
Brands:
- MAN Truck & Bus: Here I would like to suggest to update the numbers at the end (2015 --> 2018) and change the tense of the sentence before so that it fits to 2019. source MAN SE annual report 2018 (pdf; pp. 39-40))
- Scania: Suggestion to delete old, 2015 figures and replace them with 2018 figures as source was updated. (same source as before; Scania website has been updated)
- Volkswagen Caminhões e Ônibus: Suggestion to delete old, 2015 figures and add total vehicle sales of MAN Latin America. In addition, suggestion to delete numbers for sales of trucks and buses as they are not publicly available for MAN Latin America. New source: MAN SE Annual Report 2018 (pdf; p. 41)
- RIO: Suggestion to replace old, no longer existing company name (Volkswagen Truck & Bus) with new name (TRATON) including new source
In addition to these suggested changes, I checked the current sources and either formatted them now including a url or used a new, more reliable, independent source, e.g. where a press release was used before.
I am looking forward to feedback. Please let me know if you have any questions or if I should do something different.
@Eight.valve:, @Urbanoc:, wondering if you would be interested to look at this request, since you have made edits to this article before.
I greatly appreciate everybodys time and help with this! Thanks in advance, Conandcon (talk) 15:59, 28 November 2019 (UTC)
- Conandcon, sure, I'll check your proposals, not right now as I'm a little busy, but ASAP. Regards. --Urbanoc (talk) 19:21, 28 November 2019 (UTC)
- I implemented many of your suggestions, but , after closer examination of the article, I toned down many of the PR stuff I found. I don't know who added it, but it was too much. The nonsensical PR wording started from the lead section: "The Group aims to realign the transport system – with its products, its services, and as a partner to its customers" (?).
- I also removed some colourful wording, making sentences more sticking to facts (removed WP:SOLUTIONS, marketing babble, and so on). I removed some paragraphs coming from the company PR that didn't bring any real information and could be considered close paraphrasing (WP:COPYVIO). I didn't include RIO together with the vehicle marques as it isn't really that. Regards. --Urbanoc (talk) 00:30, 29 November 2019 (UTC)
- Urbanoc, Thank you very much, this is greatly appreciated! Also, not sure who added the "PR stuff". After your changes and the further changes by Melcous, might it make sense to remove the maintenance template and also close this edit request? Also Melcous, may I ask why you deleted the information about the management? Traton's set-up in a matrix organization with members from the brands in the board is not a usual set-up of a company and might therefore be of interest to readers. Just thought I'd ask. Thanks again and best regards, Conandcon (talk) 12:21, 29 November 2019 (UTC)
- Urbanoc, I removed the management section because it was written in a promotional way (e.g. "Brands coordinated in an optimum way" is clearly not neutral language) and because the list of names was to a primary source with no evidence that any of those people are notable. That is exactly the kind of information that belongs on a company website, not in an encyclopedia. Thanks, Melcous (talk) 23:45, 29 November 2019 (UTC)
- Melcous and why do you say that to me? I didn't question your changes. --Urbanoc (talk) 02:06, 30 November 2019 (UTC)
- Sorry Urbanoc, I misread the comment above which was directed to you and then mentioned me. My comment is a response to Conandcon's question above about why I removed the section about management. Cheers Melcous (talk) 04:11, 30 November 2019 (UTC)
- Melcous, Thanks for getting back to me on this and helping improve the article! Now I have a better understanding on why you removed the management section. Didn't want to argue either - reads good now. Wish you all the best, Conandcon (talk) 08:03, 30 November 2019 (UTC)
- Melcous, oh, I see, thanks for clarifying that. I didn't indent the conversation properly (I tend to do it badly), so I admit it looks messy! Thanks all for helping with the article!. --Urbanoc (talk) 12:17, 30 November 2019 (UTC)
- Sorry Urbanoc, I misread the comment above which was directed to you and then mentioned me. My comment is a response to Conandcon's question above about why I removed the section about management. Cheers Melcous (talk) 04:11, 30 November 2019 (UTC)
- Melcous and why do you say that to me? I didn't question your changes. --Urbanoc (talk) 02:06, 30 November 2019 (UTC)
Proposing update of company figures[edit]
 | This edit request by an editor with a conflict of interest has now been answered. |
Dear all,
I would like to suggest to update the numbers after the annual report for 2019 has been published 23 March. Please note that I have a financial conflict of interest as I am being paid by TRATON SE. Therefore, I will not make any edits myself but hope that uninvolved editors could review my suggestions and make changes if they find them appropriate.
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Suggested changes to the Introduction section:
Suggested changes to the info box:
Suggested changes to the Brands section:
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@Urbanoc: Would you be willing to review my suggestions again? They are really just an update of current figures. Looking forward to your feedback. Thank you very much in advance!
Best, Conandcon (talk) 10:14, 10 April 2020 (UTC)
- Sure, I'll take a look. At first glance, the changes seem reasonable. --Urbanoc (talk) 20:36, 10 April 2020 (UTC)
Proposing update of company figures 2020[edit]
| This edit request by an editor with a conflict of interest has now been answered. |
Dear all,
I would like to suggest to update the numbers after the annual report for 2020 has been published 10 March - just like last year (see above). Please note that I have a financial conflict of interest as I am being paid by TRATON SE. Therefore, I will not make any edits myself but hope that uninvolved editors could review my suggestions and make changes if they find them appropriate.
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Suggested changes to the Introduction section:
Suggested changes to the info box:
Suggested changes to the Brands section:
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@Urbanoc: Would you be willing to review my suggestions again? They are - just like last year - really just an update of current figures. Looking forward to your feedback. Thank you very much in advance!
Best, Conandcon (talk) 20:15, 23 March 2021 (UTC)
- @Conandcon: sure, no problem. I'll take a look ASAP. If someone can do it before I do, he/she may proceed. Regards. --Urbanoc (talk) 20:41, 23 March 2021 (UTC)
- @Conandcon:
Done. Tell me if I messed up something and/or you have questions. None of your edit suggestions seemed controversial at all, so I tried to implement all of them. The fact you always take the work to neatly present your requests makes things easier, so it took me just a few minutes to complete the edits. Regards. --Urbanoc (talk) 01:24, 24 March 2021 (UTC)
- @Conandcon: