Talk:Tropical Storm Danny (2021)/GA1
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Reviewer: Etriusus (talk · contribs) 05:19, 10 August 2023 (UTC)
Grabbing this review, notes will be forthcoming. 🏵️Etrius ( Us) 05:19, 10 August 2023 (UTC)
Images[edit]
- Rights are in order
- No issue with captions
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Sources[edit]
- I see how the NHC website works, can you make the sourced link specific to the report rather than to the overall list? (FN 4,5,6,8)
- Consider archiving all sources (optional)
Copy-Vios[edit]
- Nothing of note. Spot checks and Earwig are clear.
Misc[edit]
- Page is stable
- Author is not the main contributor, but is a major contributor
Prose[edit]
- "briskly " WP:PUFFERY
At 06:00 UTC on the next day, the system further strengthened into a tropical storm, attaining the name Danny east-southeast of Charleston, South Carolina.
awkward wording
anny then made landfall in Pritchards Island, north of Hilton Head, in a slightly weakened state at 23:20 UTC on the same day, with winds of 40 mph (64 km/h) and indicating that Danny weakened prior to moving inland.
run-on sentence
and a tropical depression in 1979
more specific
- "High rainfall amounts were" reword to "heavy rainfall was"
- "the low" establish synonym in the sentence prior
- 'buoy'... buoy what?
- "low model support." clarify
- "The warnings on the state from Danny were canceled" typo, not 100% sure what you meant here
along with a high risk of rip currents from Sumter to Charleston beaches
idea is disconnected from the rest of the sentence
that same day, a weather station at Folly Beach recorded a wind gust of 41 mph (66 kph) as Danny moved inland
wrong section
This will be all for now, kicking it back to you. 🏵️Etrius ( Us) 04:02, 12 August 2023 (UTC)
- @Tails Wx Looks, good. I made some minor edits, please review when you can. At this time, I'm signing off on the GA, congrats!!!
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