Talk:Tropical Storm Sebastien (1995)/GA1

GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: Marcusmax(speak) 00:06, 29 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I will be reviewing this article in the coming hours, and will share my findings and judgment. Thanks -Marcusmax(speak) 00:06, 29 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

Is it reasonably well written?
A. Prose quality:
In the first paragraph of Meteorological history a sentence needs to be clarified, "The next day shower activity increased with a tropical _______ and was declared a depression by the afternoon on October 20." Please Fill in the blank. In the same paragraph a sentence states, "Upon do so, the depression had became better organized and then gained a decent outflow." Please fix this, it is impossible to understand. The next paragraph is very confusing and does not flow correctly. For instance what does, "However, this did not happen." mean. What, did not happen? In the last paragraph of Meteorological history does not flow as it should, too many sentences start with "Sebastien", and many sentences can be combined. I have gone ahead and fixed the Preparations and Impact section which was significantly better. I also worked on the lead, but what needs the work is definitely Meteorological history.

B. MoS compliance:
There were some issues, but I fixed them. For the future make sure to check your past tense usage.
Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
A. References to sources:

B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:

C. No original research:
Is it broad in its coverage?
A. Major aspects:
I say given the relatively short lived nature of this system the content is adequate, but if this ever goes to WP:FAC I suggest the impact section be expanded.

B. Focused:
Is it neutral?
Fair representation without bias:
Is it stable?
No edit wars, etc:
Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:

B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
Overall:
Pass or Fail:
See my comments below.

Comments[edit]

Overall it is a nice article and adequately covers the subject, but the sentence clarity, and structure issues must be addressed before I can pass it. As you make changes please list them below this comment and I will check them off the list. -Marcusmax(speak) 00:54, 29 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I have adressed the issues above, and gave it a minor copyedit. Leave Message, Yellow Evan home 01:31, 29 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Okay good job making the corrections, im going to pass this article. It's always nice when you can pass a GAN in one day. -Marcusmax(speak) 01:42, 29 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]