Talk:Tsunkatse/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Ruby2010 (talk · contribs) 01:37, 31 October 2013 (UTC)

I shall review this. Ruby 2010/2013 01:37, 31 October 2013 (UTC)

There's no rush as I'm on holiday until the 5th November at the moment. Miyagawa (talk) 12:53, 31 October 2013 (UTC)

Sounds good. Ruby 2010/2013 13:12, 31 October 2013 (UTC)

Ok, I'm back! :) Miyagawa (talk) 20:42, 5 November 2013 (UTC)

Great! Hope you had a good holiday! :) I should get to posting my review later today. Ruby 2010/2013 21:35, 5 November 2013 (UTC)

Comments

• The episode had originally been called "Arena". It was described as a "clever marketing ploy" by Russ... -- This implies that the name change was the clever marketing ploy, which I'm sure it wasn't. Suggest tweaking

• I flipped around the Russ line so it doesn't link it to Arena anymore. That was unintentional. Miyagawa (talk) 22:40, 8 November 2013 (UTC)

• Sweeps month could use a wikilink

• Added - also the the mention down in the reception section. Miyagawa (talk) 22:40, 8 November 2013 (UTC)

• It received mixed ratings by critics --> It received mixed reviews by critics... (since you mention actual ratings in the previous sentence)

• Changed as suggested. Miyagawa (talk) 22:40, 8 November 2013 (UTC)

• However, the fight scenes were praised by Black Belt magazine. -- Not sure that the "however" is needed here

• Removed. Miyagawa (talk) 22:40, 8 November 2013 (UTC)

• I'd add a wikilink to Shore leave in the plot section

• Done. Miyagawa (talk) 22:40, 8 November 2013 (UTC)

I got through the plot section; will add more tomorrow. Thanks, Ruby 2010/2013 04:16, 6 November 2013 (UTC)

Sorry about the delay with this. Have added my final comments below.

• He discloses his gratefulness... --> "The Hirogen discloses his gratefulness..." (I assume?)

• Yep. I've adjusted as noted. Miyagawa (talk) 20:04, 16 November 2013 (UTC)

• Use consistency between percent and %

• I've swapped out the two "%"s for "percent". Miyagawa (talk) 20:04, 16 November 2013 (UTC)

• Is there any data out there on total viewers?

• None I'm afraid. Miyagawa (talk) 20:04, 16 November 2013 (UTC)

• Do you have Highbeam access? I tried looking for data on total viewers and instead found these independent sources on some of the ratings you already include. I recommend you add them in to bolster your TrekNation.com citations [1] [2]

• Added both of them - I hadn't thought to check Highbeam (I've had Questia for the last year and only just got Highbeam back again). Miyagawa (talk) 20:04, 16 November 2013 (UTC)

• I found this from Black Belt magazine and was about to recommend you input it. But you already have! :) Very thorough research on your part.

Will place the review on hold for seven days, though I doubt it will take that long. Ruby 2010/2013 15:07, 12 November 2013 (UTC)

• Sorry about the delay, I've made the suggested changes. Miyagawa (talk) 20:04, 16 November 2013 (UTC)

• Looks good! Happy to pass this one. Ruby 2010/2013 15:14, 18 November 2013 (UTC)