Talk:USS Florida (BB-30)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Ed! (talk · contribs) 00:27, 8 May 2013 (UTC)

• "She displaced 21,825 long tons (22,175 t) as designed and up to 23,033 long tons (23,403 t) at full combat load. " -- I presume she was designed to have a full combat load. As worded it sounds a little like this isn't the case.
  • Basically, the difference is between normal and wartime loading - the ship necessarily has more ammunition, fuel, stores, and such aboard (and the crews are usually larger) during combat operations.
• "Both ships landed a contingent of a thousand marines and bluejackets to begin the occupation of the city on 21 April. Over the next three days, the marines battled rebels in the city and suffered 94 casualties, while killing hundreds of Mexicans in return." -- Inconsistent use of numerals versus words, considering numbers over 10 are usually numerals.
  • Changed to "ninety-four"
• For consistency's sake, I think you should redlink 2nd Battleship Division since 1st Battleship Division is linked.
  • Done.
• "Florida was the only ship of the American contingent not to be quarantined for the virus" -- So did this mean no one on her crew was infected, or that what?
  • Yes, Florida was the only ship of the unit to avoid contamination with the virus.
• "Under the terms of the London Naval Treaty of 1930, she was to be disposed." -- What kind of terms specifically? Was she too heavy, or were there too many battleships in the fleet and she was downsized?
  • The treaty specifically listed Florida, Utah, and either Arkansas or Wyoming to be demilitarized (see here for the text of the treaty).
• There are no dab links or duplicate links. External links all appear to work. All images appear to be properly licensed.

Placing the article on hold pending fixes. —Ed!^(talk) 00:13, 13 May 2013 (UTC)

Great work! Passing the GA. —Ed!^(talk) 19:52, 13 May 2013 (UTC)