Talk:W.E.B. Du Bois Boyhood Homesite/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: TonyTheTiger (talk · contribs) 02:43, 6 August 2013 (UTC)

I'll do this review.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/WP:FOUR/WP:CHICAGO/WP:WAWARD) 02:43, 6 August 2013 (UTC)

WP:LEAD

• It seems to me that one of the most important things about this subject is it becoming a NHL and NHRP. These dates should be in the LEAD.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/WP:FOUR/WP:CHICAGO/WP:WAWARD) 03:07, 8 August 2013 (UTC)
  • Done. Magic♪piano 16:14, 8 August 2013 (UTC)
• The lead almost makes it seem like he used it as a summer retreat.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/WP:FOUR/WP:CHICAGO/WP:WAWARD) 02:23, 9 August 2013 (UTC)
  • I've rephrased that part. Magic♪piano 17:17, 9 August 2013 (UTC)

History

• The second sentence is very convoluted in the sense that who seems to refer to family.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/WP:FOUR/WP:CHICAGO/WP:WAWARD) 03:13, 8 August 2013 (UTC)
  • Reworded. Magic♪piano 16:14, 8 August 2013 (UTC)
• Why does the LEAD mention use as a summer retreat that is omited in the main body?--TonyTheTiger (T/C/WP:FOUR/WP:CHICAGO/WP:WAWARD) 03:13, 8 August 2013 (UTC)
  • "Du Bois developed plans to transform the property into a middle-class summer retreat,..." Magic♪piano 15:47, 8 August 2013 (UTC)

• Is it possible to produce a map of this sight.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/WP:FOUR/WP:CHICAGO/WP:WAWARD) 03:39, 8 August 2013 (UTC)
  • I don't believe I've seen a map of the grounds, although I might be able to reproduce one in Inkscape based on an annotated aerial photo in one of the sources. Magic♪piano 14:43, 8 August 2013 (UTC)
    • That would be helpful.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/WP:FOUR/WP:CHICAGO/WP:WAWARD) 02:18, 9 August 2013 (UTC)
      • Added a site map. Magic♪piano 17:17, 9 August 2013 (UTC)

• All three images and WP:CAPTIONs are fine.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/WP:FOUR/WP:CHICAGO/WP:WAWARD) 03:39, 8 August 2013 (UTC)

• I am putting this on hold. The issues are minor.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/WP:FOUR/WP:CHICAGO/WP:WAWARD) 03:46, 8 August 2013 (UTC)
  • Thanks for your efforts. I am now PASSING this article.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/WP:FOUR/WP:CHICAGO/WP:WAWARD) 18:11, 9 August 2013 (UTC)