Talk:Will Rogers (American football)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Gonzo fan2007 (talk · contribs) 14:40, 16 May 2023 (UTC)

I'll take this one. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 14:40, 16 May 2023 (UTC)

General

• MOS:DASH, go through and update all the hyphens to en dashes.
  • Done

Lead

• Expand lead to include info about high school career.
  • Done
• MOS:CITELEAD, no need for the inline citation in the lead.
  • Done

Early life and high school career

• Rogers was born on August 19, 2001 in Louisville, Mississippi., comma after "2001"
  • Done
• I would spell out the whole link Brandon, Mississippi, since "Brandon" is typically a first name.
• Done
• A strong athlete, he played a variety of sports growing up, including baseball and soccer but was the most passionate about football, where in elementary school he ran drills with his fathers high school players., I would split into two sentences. ...and soccer. However, he was the most...
  • Done
• fathers high school players., "fathers" should be "father's"
  • Done
• MOS:ACRO1STUSE, spell out NFL in it's first use
  • Done
• under his father who served as the teams offensive coordinator, "teams" should be "team's"
  • Done

College career

• for the seasons first game., "seasons" should be "season's"
  • Done
• ...replacing a struggling Costello. Rogers struggled in his debut, throwing two interceptions., repetitive use of "struggle" sounds weird
  • Changed word
• ...have a historic performance on the road against Auburn., the hidden linking of "road" isn't necessary
  • Removed
• Two weeks later he had his highest passer rating of the season, posting a 194.0 rating in a blowout win over East Tennessee State., the duplication of "rating" sounds weird, maybe try to rewrite a bit?
  • Rewrote sentence
• coach Mike Leach unexpectedly passed away after suffering a heart attack, delete "unexpectedly" and replace "passed away" with "died" MOS:EUPHEMISM
  • Done

Images

• No images.

References

• Need consistency with date formatting, i.e. 2023-04-02 vs April 2, 2023. Pick one and stick with it throughout.
• Done
• Ref 9: MOS:ALLCAPS, convert the title to normal case
• Done
• Be consistent with the website field, either use .com or not across all of them (i.e. Yahoo vs Yahoo.com)
  • Done
• Ref 34: the website should just be "WRUF.com" or "WRUF"
• Done
• Ref 10: where does it say he is the 24th best pro-style QB of his class?
  • Fixed
• All other refs look good, spot checks seemed good.

Nice work. Putting on hold. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 14:40, 16 May 2023 (UTC)

@Gonzo fan2007 I believe that I have fixed everything. Newtothisedit (talk) 16:17, 18 May 2023 (UTC)

Looks good, passing! « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 16:27, 18 May 2023 (UTC)

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