Talk:William Hardham/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Chetsford (talk · contribs) 03:18, 14 July 2018 (UTC)

Well written

• Prose:

Is "Military Forces" in "New Zealand Military Forces" a proper name that should be capitalized? I don't know myself but, if it's not, we might want to go with "military forces". (Edit - nm/ it is [1]) I don't think "coronation" should be capitalized when it appears mid-sentence, as in the second paragraph of the lead and later in the body (correct me if I'm wrong). I wonder if we could substitute "Although treated for his injuries" for "Although treated for his wounds" to avoid the redundant appearance of "wounds" in the preceding sentence?

• Have actioned the above. Zawed (talk) 08:02, 14 July 2018 (UTC)

• MOS:

MOS:LEADLENGTH says that articles of this size should have a lead of 1-2 paragraphs, while this one has three paragraphs. I feel like "First World War" should be wikilinked in the lead. I don't know for a fact but, in other articles I see "née Gregory" used as a paranthetical as in "(née Gregory)".

• have trimmed the lead and merged the 2nd and 3rd paragraphs. Also put nee into brackets. Zawed (talk) 08:02, 14 July 2018 (UTC)

Factually accurate / verifiable

• References:

The references are both books by reputable publishers.

• RS:

Standby - need to check references as both are offline. Update - everything looks good.

• Happy to scan the relevant pages and email them to you if need be. Zawed (talk) 08:07, 14 July 2018 (UTC)

• OR:

Standby - need to check references as both are offline. Update - everything looks good.

• Copyvio:

Earwig reports "violation unlikely."

Breadth

• Major aspects:
• Focused:

Stability

• Stable:

No active discussions on Talk page, no signs of edit warring.

Images

• Illustrated:

One optional request - could we move the last image up just a bit so it's not hanging down below the article?

• Done. Zawed (talk) 08:10, 14 July 2018 (UTC)

• Licensed:

All images are PD.

Overall

This is in very good condition so there's not a lot to comment on, though I had a few minor points above, some of which can be optionally addressed. (Honestly, I sort-of picked this GA specifically because a cursory glance made it appear to be an easy one.) I'll need to wait a couple days before verifying references and OR since the sources are offline so will need to try and source them elsewhere. Overall, though, this is quite nice work! Chetsford (talk) 03:18, 14 July 2018 (UTC)

Thanks for the review, much appreciated. I have replied to your points above and look forward to your further comments. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 08:11, 14 July 2018 (UTC)

Thanks, Zawed. That all looks good. I need to go to the library on Monday so I should be able to review the OR/RS then. Chetsford (talk) 05:34, 15 July 2018 (UTC)

Passing to GA. Zawed, this was definitely the easiest GAR I've done! Congrats again on a great article. Chetsford (talk) 20:49, 16 July 2018 (UTC)