Talk:Women's health in India/GA1

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Reviewer: Chiswick Chap (talk · contribs) 06:33, 7 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

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1. Well-written:
1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct. ok
1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation. Lead: too short, see comment at end; layout: ok; weasel: ok; fiction: n/a; lists: n/a
2. Verifiable with no original research:
2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline. ok
2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose). well referenced
2c. it contains no original research. ok
3. Broad in its coverage:
3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic. appears to cover the topic well
3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style). does not wander
4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each. good
5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute. no problem
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content. existing images from Commons
6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions. yes, but see comment and suggestions below
7. Overall assessment. A worthy article, and an impressive piece of work on a WAP. There inevitably remains scope for other editors to continue to improve the article. There are suggestions below for further work. Chiswick Chap (talk) 19:50, 9 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Two immediate comments:

  • the lead is too short for the article. It should be of up to four paragraphs, and should summarize the article's main sections. Thus, a paragraph on gender bias, one on healthcare problems, and one on outcomes would seem reasonable.

-- I have split it into three short paragraphs. The article covers so many topis from a wide range of subjects, it is difficult to summarize! --Tito Dutta  (talk • contributions • email) 19:05, 9 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

  • the 'See also' list is too long or perhaps altogether undesirable. For example, 'women in India' is already linked in the lead and can readily be linked in the first paragraph of 'Gender bias...', and then removed from the list. Probably most other items can be treated similarly. Chiswick Chap (talk) 06:33, 7 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

--  Done removed few entries! --Tito Dutta  (talk • contributions • email) 19:05, 9 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

  • The article is arguably under-illustrated. You might like to consider using a variety of images such as

Chiswick Chap (talk) 07:02, 7 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

  • The article mentions the problems only but not the way India is attempting to solve them. I am unsure if these images are relevant to the article. I have added on image! --Tito Dutta  (talk • contributions • email) 19:17, 9 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Many thanks. I think the article is of acceptable standard now, having also done some cleaning up. I agree that there is scope for more on solutions as those are developed and documented. Chiswick Chap (talk) 19:50, 9 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
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